Sentus-Lost Hope

[classthe_king]

Re-wrote it also, opinions?

I get knocked down, but I'll step in the booth
I'm lettin it loose, I never accept an excuse
One present from Zeus n you dead in ya shoes
This new weapon to use is affectin the fuse
I fire out at the public so fuck settin a truce
Im strangling the wack like a neck in a noose
Wreckin the youth wit rapping so dastardly
You all are impervious to the words we spit,
But what's disturbing is it's backwards see
You won't believe how pliant these rap nerds be
So you follow and listen to every word I say
Well I don't give a fuck and I prefer my way
I deserve my stay trapped in the jungle of sin
One night with the tigers and the fun will begin
But I can move on, ive beat the struggle within
And tamed the flaming fury burning under my skin

I’m not going to give up to this lost hope
Ill cock back, and fire off like a cross bow
Because it doesn’t matter what's the cost yo
I'll keep searching until I find my lost hope

You're all sounding innocent when you vent,
Cracking like thin cement, but my pen has sent
You in descent wit this intricate defense of wit
Cause few contends with who is not in pretend
In the end you know you’ve got a special thing
You receive love and that’s what respect will bring
Don't check a thing, sitting on top of the world
But at any moment you can drop to the floor
You don’t get rocked anymore, copped anymore
Your fans don’t run screaming, stunned gleaming
They done dreaming when they flock anymore
Cause eventually we all get popped when we soar
And sent straight to the underground and slumps
You're actin like trash when your around the dumps
Then you get a goat when there out the struggle twice
You can choose it if you keep you knuckles tight

Chorus

I’m just tryin to mediate all my greed n’ hate
Weepin now, beatin down on this bleedin slate
Don’t feed the hate it comes back to bight ya
With all the hate I'll become wack to spite ya
My raps excite ya; I need one match to light ya
Sprung traps unwrap you from rap, despite ya
Well tonight the roof will come crashing down
Trappin and scratchin with the slashing sound
I’m lashing out at who doesn’t listen to the words
Its sick n disturbed, cause your resistin the verse
My mission to hurt all wack that exist on the earth
Is an emission of bursts that leaves ya kissin the dirt
You are missin the birth of the rise of the hope
But he's lost and misguided by the lies n the smoke
That's clouded fans, your surprised at whats wrote
It's a new age to rage for the cries of the broke

[Slim Zaddy]

Re-wrote it also, opinions?

I get knocked down, but I'll step in the booth
I'm lettin it loose, I never accept an excuse
One present from Zeus n you dead in ya shoes
This new weapon to use is affectin the fuse
You won't believe how pliant these rap nerds be
So you follow and listen to every word I say
Well I don't give a fuck and I prefer my way
I deserve my stay trapped in the jungle of sin
One night with the tigers and the fun will begin
But I can move on, ive beat the struggle within
And tamed the flaming fury burning under my skin

I’m not going to give up to this lost hope
Ill cock back, and fire off like a cross bow
Because it doesn’t matter what's the cost yo
I'll keep searching until I find my lost hope

You're all sounding innocent when you vent,
Cracking like thin cement, but my pen has sent

Don't check a thing, sitting on top of the world
But at any moment you can drop to the floor

They done dreaming when they flock anymore
Cause eventually we all get popped when we soar
And sent straight to the underground and slumps


Well tonight the roof will come crashing down
Trappin and scratchin with the slashing sound
I’m lashing out at who doesn’t listen to the words
Its sick n disturbed, cause your resistin the verse
My mission to hurt all wack that exist on the earth

You are missin the birth of the rise of the hope
But he's lost and misguided by the lies n the smoke
That's clouded fans, your surprised at whats wrote
It's a new age to rage for the cries of the broke

damn classthe,,,, these lines are so so sick ,, dude,,,, i liked these da most,, but the rest still dope ,, man ,, it flowed really nice,, you got the message clear , you delivered it in a perfect way ,, rhymes and lyrics,, were dope ,, mulites and internal rhymes and way it flows,, are great,,, it's really a great piece, and a great thing to talk about ,, touchy subject ,,, one more thin ,, chorus is amazing , ,,, keeeep it up dude,, i really enjoyed it ,, 9.5/10 ,, keep doin ya staff and it will be great if you recorded it ,,

[Solace]

I really don't understand how you've gotten this good bro. Your lines are filled with meaning and are not fillers yet you make it seem so easy to keep a dope flow with the consistent internal multi-syllable rhymes. Great job.

[classthe_king]

Thanks alot both of you

[classthe_king]

Haha thakns cole