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2nd Verse of Confession

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 13th, '10, 06:55

The anticipated 2nd verse has arrived!Enjoy! :smoking:

Not a corny rap from a horny lonely lad,
But my heart makes art on my only pad,
I’ve had enough with all this stupid talk,
Watching you on stage play fluid Rock,
Time to at last finally speak my mind,
Leak what’s mine this week and time,
Allways been hiding my true feelings,
I must show you my new revealings,
You know you’re beautiful head to toe,
Been said before, I must let you know,
Girl, this can’t just be written on paper,
Emotions hard to see like hidden vapor,
Your laid back, cool, my unique KitKat,
I’m a gentleman, hit me I won’t hit back,
Not 50 Cent, won’t be finding a six pack,
But you will be finding love I’ll admit that,
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby classthe_king » Mar 13th, '10, 18:27

It started off kinda weak but I started liking it about halfway through. I love your flow, its great. Your rhyming is good too for the most part. Only rhyme that didn't really work was this part
Girl, this can’t just be written on paper,
Emotions hard to see like hidden vapor,

The on through the rhyme off. It would be better if you just made it

Girl, this can’t just be on written paper,
Emotions hard to see like hidden vapor,

Good job though, keep writing, we need more writers like you :y:
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 13th, '10, 20:02

lol thx a lot man..appreciate your help and feed :smoking:
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby dR3 » Mar 13th, '10, 20:19

I like it, not on the same level as the first one, but I like it.

You planning on recording it?
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 13th, '10, 20:21

dR.dR3 wrote:I like it, not on the same level as the first one, but I like it.

You planning on recording it?

of course :D

Once I find someone to work with me, I'm recording all my material and make it a CD including this :8)
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby dR3 » Mar 14th, '10, 03:44

Ok, make sure you post it here.
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 14th, '10, 03:46

dR.dR3 wrote:Ok, make sure you post it here.

I will. :)
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby dR3 » Mar 15th, '10, 00:07

And get Tash to mix it for you.
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 15th, '10, 02:51

dR.dR3 wrote:And get Tash to mix it for you.

Will do....

so I send him my vocals and my beat separately? or what? :unsure:
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby dR3 » Mar 15th, '10, 14:36

I don't know, PM him.
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Re: 2nd Verse of Confession

Postby Element. » Mar 20th, '10, 01:25

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dR.dR3 wrote:I like it, not on the same level as the first one, but I like it.

You planning on recording it?

of course :D

Once I find someone to work with me, I'm recording all my material and make it a CD including this :8)


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