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Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

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Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby classthe_king » Mar 13th, '10, 16:41

(Enimee)
i drop hot 16 with ease that shits effortless
and when i spit i continue to rip indefinite
the rest get more hits then weezy's record gets
thats blows, cause when its beef i use bones to settle it
hotter then the metal get after i empty clips
im part of the majority risin your the bottom of the deficit
parents back home will prolly get upset at this
but yall lack examples so im the one who's probably settin it
properly wreckin it, couldn't stop me with sedatives
i rock out in drop tops and the floor is always where the pedal is
harder then Connecticut and every line is venomous
every time i get a swish, i flip dat and end up spendin it
endin up penniless got a fetish for the grind thats why i swindled it
even still every contender get dismembered when i render it
and im addicted to the suck and your girl so good at it
that i keep her solvin my problem with wood like mathematics

(Sentus)
My style's infliction is to bring the foulest affliction
You listened when we spoke of this hostile condition
My mortuary melodies re-wrote the ballads depictions
I go in beast mode when you challenge the sick ones
Go ahead, you'll have bestowed the malice intentions
Right when you punks decode the palace encryptions
The talons have gripped him and he will never escape
My letters reshape rap's frame when I sever the greats
Never debate, I'm a boulder, you guys are minerals
Now the five star generals are ahead by far intervals
My arms are tentacles, so strong even the best be weary
The whole game is swarmed by this verbal vespiary
He must be scary, not really, rap is just scared of us
So just let me entertain you like Maximus Meridius
Relax and just bear with us, cause you cunts are so sad
I am so dirty in the booth Mike Rowe wants a Collab
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby Spyder » Mar 14th, '10, 04:00

enimee - not bad verse bro, rhymes and multies and vocab was prett basic but the flow was all there. punches were kinda weak alot of played stuff but not bad. didnt like the one multie throughout tho :y:

class - i felt you were trying to use a large vocab which kinda threw the piece off for me, rhyming and multies were good. good vocab but again seemed forced. flow was alright on this one

not a bad collab
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Re: Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby classthe_king » Mar 14th, '10, 17:09

Thanks for the feed, ill fix the flow
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Re: Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby classthe_king » Mar 18th, '10, 11:27

Thanks Cole :y:

Uppin for feed
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Re: Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 18th, '10, 11:36

Enimee...you need to change up your style a bit...every piece I see from you is similar to this one...oh and make sure you capitalize "I's" and the beginning of each bar...idk it just looks better...flows good though

Class, goddamnit you always evolving...I aint ever heard a flow like this from you...and your multis are even more complex than they appear cause at a glance they don't look really like multis...but I went back and reread your verse...the only thing I would say is the wordplay might be piled on a little too much but that's easily fixed...whatever but good drop from both of yall...
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Re: Sentus & Enimee-Mortuary Melodies

Postby classthe_king » Mar 18th, '10, 21:24

Thanks alot Fa-q
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