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1st Verse Of Respect

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1st Verse Of Respect

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 14th, '10, 05:40

I'm not the truest, illest, killer on the streets of Compton,
But my skills stomp on any hard ass that calls me soft and,
In my schools, I'm frontin' for trying to bust a freestyle,
Though, I won the battle, took it home and said peace out,
Sometimes I wanna say that to this corrupted game,
Don't even care to become rich and erupt in fame,
But before I must display my skill, a gamma ray that will,
Dismay and kill, any rapper that stands in my way until,
They respect me as a real, true MC to this day or deal,
With immense pain as their vocal cords decay for real,
'Cause when X'ed Up speaks, you are fucked for weeks,
Your fucking stuff reaks, there are not enough beats,
To make your shitty babbling, sound like witty battling,
Your fucking flow's as slow as a pair of titty's rattling,
Respect is something I have yet to gain from peers,
Willing to get it even if I must pay with pain and tears,
Last edited by X'ed Up on Mar 22nd, '10, 00:29, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby B.A.D. » Mar 14th, '10, 10:12

very nice

the structure and line/bar planning are great.... although you can step up the vocabulary a bit

other than that, excelent... good drop
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 14th, '10, 21:24

Much thanks Big-Ax :y:

Will do step that vocabular up homey :smoking:
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby dR3 » Mar 15th, '10, 00:10

Fucking nice, you will get the respect you are looking for. :y:
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 15th, '10, 02:52

dR.dR3 wrote:Fucking nice, you will get the respect you are looking for. :y:

Hoping because everyone think I'm "fronting" when I try to rap because I'm a light skinned :coffee:

Fucking retarded. :shakehead:
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby dR3 » Mar 15th, '10, 14:35

:laughing:
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby X'ed Up » Mar 15th, '10, 22:52

dR.dR3 wrote::laughing:

I forgot your dR.dR3 :facepalm
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 23:00

Great flow on this trick...damn man I envy your structure...anxious to see full song X :)
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Re: 1st Verse Of Respect

Postby dR3 » Mar 15th, '10, 23:27

X'ed Up wrote:
dR.dR3 wrote::laughing:

I forgot your dR.dR3 :facepalm

huh?
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