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Piece of the pie

Postby Just Silver » Mar 15th, '10, 21:53

420 keystyle :smoking:




You maybe deep but i aim for shallow
Break you knees and hip cut through marrow
And shoot through narrow, ways to their Camaro
Come back and get me for my Denerios
You want however, how you bring terror,
I take errors out, till the spring to december,
I let it hang out, slain pouted,mouths
Gain retain my spouse from the crack heads house
And cracked his head till brains out
Fill the same house with screams and shouts
And time to reroute shit the police is out
Time to stay loyal please myself
Im boss stay true stay a key above shelves
The true key of new beings im redeeming my health
If i want to be a demon of wealth
Ill just tie moneybags with a belt
Big green "S" that is felt
Im impressed with this hell
Not as bad as it sells
Bad don't thinks so but kills then slowly
Imagine life times 6 you start at 40
A brand new mix of selfish loathing
Than a brand new man with felt-ish clothing
Reminds you of times when it was earned not spent
Like a side story was relevant hes hella shit
He would know the deal without me tellin it
Imaginative yes realistic no
Feel the viscous flow the thickness of the words i throw
Big enough to sink boats so high there pink boats
I lie now sink, scope repeat then take tokes
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Re: Piece of the pie

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 15th, '10, 22:51

Damn Silv, not one of your better pieces....keep writing to get out of this block tho
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Re: Piece of the pie

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 17th, '10, 13:47

i enjoyed reading it ,,, but it's a weak piece,, man ,, try to use more vocab ,, more similes, and also ,, play wit the words, and make it look complex while it's not ,,,, but practice makes perfect ,,, so keeeep writing man ,,,,,,, :y:
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Re: Piece of the pie

Postby Just Silver » Mar 18th, '10, 00:17

Slim Zaddy wrote:i enjoyed reading it ,,, but it's a weak piece,, man ,, try to use more vocab ,, more similes, and also ,, play wit the words, and make it look complex while it's not ,,,, but practice makes perfect ,,, so keeeep writing man ,,,,,,, :y:

yea it was just a keystyle so not really surprised how it came out

and since TR is down almost all the time for me im barely ever on anymore
hoping it gets back with a reliable server
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