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Broken III

Postby gutawafang » Mar 10th, '10, 00:43

You don’t care…

It caused you blindness
Can’t see me tears,
Can’t even hear me.
Cuz it took your hearing away too.

You’re strangling me…

I need a knife to cut me free.
Got it.
But it isn’t sharp enough.
You’re suffocating me.

You suffer me…

Worse than living in poverty.
Can’t even eat.
Can’t breathe anymore.
Let me go, please.

You’re killing me…

No, I still wish to love you.
But.
Why do you hate me back?
Please hurt me by not loving me back instead…

Don’t hate me…
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Re: Broken III

Postby Solace » Mar 18th, '10, 02:13

Can't comment on this much but I loved it. Such simple words gave me beautiful imagery. :y:
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Re: Broken III

Postby gutawafang » Mar 18th, '10, 05:55

Solace wrote:Can't comment on this much but I loved it. Such simple words gave me beautiful imagery. :y:

Thank you man. :flower:
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Re: Broken III

Postby FAME » Mar 19th, '10, 03:16

This is the CW only for gangsta rapping boyz! :angry:
I'm just kidding ;) I love poetry/song stuff in the CW because it's something fresh in this section. So I hope to see more of this kind of stuff from you. I can really feel this piece (going to call it that because I dunno song or poetry) but yeah it seems like a sad piece btu I like it. Great way to get emotions out I say :y:
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Re: Broken III

Postby gutawafang » Mar 22nd, '10, 08:30

FAME wrote:This is the CW only for gangsta rapping boyz! :angry:
I'm just kidding ;) I love poetry/song stuff in the CW because it's something fresh in this section. So I hope to see more of this kind of stuff from you. I can really feel this piece (going to call it that because I dunno song or poetry) but yeah it seems like a sad piece btu I like it. Great way to get emotions out I say :y:

Thank you Fame. :y:
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Re: Broken III

Postby gutawafang » Mar 22nd, '10, 09:48

Francesco10 wrote:That's a pop-hop piece too. I'm not much of a fan of simpler lyrics with that kind of subject matter, especially if the lyrics directly address like a partner or whatever but what I'm fan of is not really important so I'll give it up to you again. You always play well with words and experiment wisely with rhymes so I won't hate, I'll congratulate. lol
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Thank you alot alot man. :happy:
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