I did this to the obvious beat, Psych Evaluation awhile back and was wondering if I could get feedback on it since I personally liked it. It was supposed to be recorded with someone but he just disappeared off another site.
Anyways, I tried to keep the atmosphere Bis created. Here's the first verse.
Psych evaluation's what you've been anticipatin'
Testifying against mainstream not just a brave men
Their time's up pasteurized but they've hit expiration
I've been too hot for too long, they can't achieve perspiration
The temperature's raisin'...microscopic organisms contaminatin'
Plaguing more than a billion brains further than the States and
3rd world countries home to poverty, murder and raping's
there's no expiation just a new gulag their life's tapering
away but me you can find anyway cus I'm a deviate
When times get rough rhymes escalate like magnitude 8 quakes
Insane raping this rap game cus I'm a morally corrupt being
Asking me to go easy...to alleviate things?
Bow to me as your deity...surrender everything
Don't look at me crazy I know that surrender feeling
I was an angel drunk with power so God clipped my wings
It seemed as if my strings were cut, severed from my entity
Trying to survive knowing somewhere I went wrong in life
But I've converted like Cortes at Cozumel given some time
My breathing causes nausea; can spark methane leaking
Now I can't rest at ease, hauntin' emcee's with hellish dreams
Criticism is appreciated.