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Only four lines are relevant?

Postby gutawafang » Apr 26th, '10, 05:09

10 mins work. XD

Nothing compares, to the flight of stairs and the fright of stares
To be in pain you cannot bare, no matter where, you’d rather wear
A fake skin over you like a hood to cover your face when you rap
Concealing your identity, changing your ID and some other crap
By making it legit with vocabulary combined with random verbs
I’m tossing and turning on this damn bed, listening to this excerpt
Like it makes sense to be a verse, fucking spaced out, that’s natural
I’m born to make things worse, in a damn race, I ain’t ever first
It’s forever worst, the results so epic, it’s a gigantic burst of the sun
According to Science, it’s the end of the curse of everyone
Dammit, all I ever do is rhyme, nothing makes sense except
This next four lines that usually makes a good song in a rap
Whether it’s the sun in the sky or the stars in the night
Nothing you’ll ever do is wrong, everything is right
You are beautiful no matter how you make you out to be not
I’m gonna love you whether you heard me or did not
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Re: Only four lines are relevant?

Postby Just Silver » Apr 26th, '10, 05:13

nice piece here had me in for the first 3 lines but then somewhere it dropped
overall great

8/10 :flower:
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Re: Only four lines are relevant?

Postby gutawafang » Apr 26th, '10, 05:15

Just Silver wrote:nice piece here had me in for the first 3 lines but then somewhere it dropped
overall great

8/10 :flower:

arigato :y:
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