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Practice verse #8.....on some other shit.....

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Practice verse #8.....on some other shit.....

Postby DƎRDYPK » May 5th, '10, 19:10

More practice.....



Your metaphors are weak. I'v heard better from Tweak's father
I'm destroying rap with every verse I write so why you geeks bother?
These wack rappers making me "LOL" they should start a group with DeadLee
fuck that! I'd rather break their bones & toss them into the Red Sea
these haters of mine don't test me. I think they secretly love me
you gotta girl but what for?.... having fantasies to fuck me?
your making me sick with that sewage rap, you sound just like a stupid ass
couldn't get an A grade on your track If you brought it to music class
& now you think I'm the battle type? what happens to kids who challenge mike?
I take this shit beyond a battle rap & leave their Adam's apple sliced
wanna try it? start a riot.....that's a better way to have fun
I got these kid praying to me 1 minute before my raps done
I'm on a quest to my tracks spun by DJ's playing wicked shit
these dancefloors are glowing red like I got my cigarette lit
I think I might be tripping a bit.....naw I'm just typing
another day I sit on my ass in front of the screen writing (badass way to end a verse huh?)


*don't ask about the 1st bar...I was watching "The Underpants Gnomes" episode of South Park last night
& yeah....I thought of that
also my 7th bar doesn't sound so good unless you say cigarette like "Sig-Rit" lol
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Re: Practice verse #8.....on some other shit.....

Postby Fa-Q » May 5th, '10, 19:28

"Step one - take underwear
Step two - ......
Step three - Profit"

Lol love that episode...anyway good verse...I really like that A grade line...some punches could have been executed a little bit better but I can tell they're close if not there already...good drop PeaKay
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Re: Practice verse #8.....on some other shit.....

Postby DƎRDYPK » May 5th, '10, 20:03

Thanks for reading bro :flower:
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