throw away

[Spyder]

was writing this a bit ago and got bored of it


The sun rises as geysers burst, high to clench my wild thirst
The day draws on, dragging decomposed stone across this vile earth
The light it burns, skin searing, mirages of melodies I’ve been hearing
Muscles pulse, thrust, give up from this pain I’m endearing
My brain is quite clearly on its last thread, close to the verge to break
How I yearn for shade, every turn I make just hurts my vertebrae.
I must learn some way to increase speed and ease the troubles I have
For every load I carry seems like it upgrades to double of that.

[Spyder]

wel if by deep you mean emotion... not at all hahah

but thanks for peepin

[mcZu]

Muscles pulse, thrust, give up from this pain I’m endearing

Don't you mean enduring? Unless you meant that you're giving love/affection to the pain..

Nonetheless, not a bad start for a story telling verse, I say finish it.

[Spyder]

Muscles pulse, thrust, give up from this pain I’m endearing

Don't you mean enduring? Unless you meant that you're giving love/affection to the pain..

Nonetheless, not a bad start for a story telling verse, I say finish it.

yea probably is and i might

Great imagery but I'm not sure where it's going. At first I envisioned a slave in Egypt lugging a huge stone then I just got lost. Good descriptions none the less.

it is a man in ancient egypt