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Postby Tash8 » May 24th, '10, 01:43

When people get blinded from the past
their vision for the future gets in wack
and it's a fact my sights 40/20 i'm double whatchu have
and ya'll lame --people keep asking for change
yet they keep tossing their quarters pennies, dimes and nickels
i'm tired of these lazy people being fickle
they say they want hope yet they have no faith
they wanna finish first but won't even bother to race
if you want something to change then do something about it
but instead yall just sit there cry and pout about it
keep complaining about global warming
shit got heated but I ain't see nobody storming
and to imprison you all i'd need is two lines drawn
thats what it really means to get locked behind bars
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Re: People

Postby classthe_king » May 24th, '10, 02:23

Good verse. I liked it more when you tried to go lyrical though
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Postby Good For Nothing » May 24th, '10, 02:30

I loved the 40/20 line, that was sexy.
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Postby gutawafang » May 24th, '10, 04:52

Haha. Pretty direct and pretty good flow too although the structure made me have to read it twice to flow.
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