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short shizzim

Postby Just Silver » May 29th, '10, 04:29

i wanted to see if this is flowable i have an idea but not really sure :smoking:

You overwhelmed maybe u just old as hell
i m straight bass makes earthquakes
molded well, while they stayed caked
hey wait you stay fake
i make what you make on a playdate
and they hate mates that save grace
knowing the same gate led my fate to the game of this age
Made me walk on a cloud,higher than humidity what the fuck now
Im gonna leave and start sprouts i will get elected and branch out
respected no doubt,deflecting both rounds of second the second coke hound
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Re: short shizzim

Postby Fa-Q » May 29th, '10, 04:32

Its not bad...what were you trying to do though
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Re: short shizzim

Postby Just Silver » May 29th, '10, 04:34

Fa-Q wrote:Its not bad...what were you trying to do though

a lengthy metaphor flow
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Postby Fa-Q » May 29th, '10, 04:35

Just Silver wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:Its not bad...what were you trying to do though

a lengthy metaphor flow

What's the metaphor?
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Postby Just Silver » May 29th, '10, 04:41

Fa-Q wrote:
Just Silver wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:Its not bad...what were you trying to do though

a lengthy metaphor flow

What's the metaphor?

not anything particular just start one off the dome then write some
similarities that turn into a whole new scenario sort of u get it :sweating:
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