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This Life I Lead

Postby ChronicJon » May 31st, '10, 09:11

Writter to a random beat. Hoping this one won't be slept on.

Yo, it's solidly concrete this life I lead,
Ain't nothing but greed and the wife I need,
'Cause a blockhead simple fucking cockhead,
Will land rock dead one day from glock lead,
But, homey please don't believe I'm afraid to die,
God made us to live so we have to made to die,
So homey if you're the hardest then test the lead,
Wanna kill me, go ahead yo, the best are dead,
Those that stood up for something have left us,
Dear god will you help us, to heaven accept us,
Even if a young rebellious teen I have become,
This music's changed me nothing can be done,
And I know tears I'll see on my mother's cheeks,
When I tell her I ditched school for other streets,
But, my country can't tell me how I must proceed,
I'm making my own life, cause this is the life I lead,
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby gutawafang » May 31st, '10, 12:35

It seems like a normal practice on multis man. :) Flow is there. Good structure.
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby ChronicJon » Jun 1st, '10, 02:05

Thanks yo, I appreciate it :y:
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby E-40 » Jun 3rd, '10, 04:59

Nikka talking bout guns. My nine is bigger than your whole leg. You can bet the bank on that.
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby ChronicJon » Jun 4th, '10, 03:48

E-40 wrote:Nikka talking bout guns. My nine is bigger than your whole leg. You can bet the bank on that.

lmao I dare you to write something half as good as this you little punk. Plus, when was i talking about guns? When I said I could die from some glock lead? Where I live it's likely. Homey, please fuck off and go WRITE some freestyles :laughing:
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby Solace » Jun 7th, '10, 21:32

ChronicJon wrote:
E-40 wrote:Nikka talking bout guns. My nine is bigger than your whole leg. You can bet the bank on that.

lmao I dare you to write something half as good as this you little punk. Plus, when was i talking about guns? When I said I could die from some glock lead? Where I live it's likely. Homey, please fuck off and go WRITE some freestyles :laughing:

E-40's actually one of the best writers on this site. And yes, you CAN write freestyles, it's not all supposed to be off the top. It's freestyle, it's free of style. It can be quick, about anything, switching randomly, playing on certain topics only or practicing only wordplay or multies etc. And E-40 was just joking, no need to take it serious and start dissing.

But overall this was a pretty solid verse. You don't suck as much dick as you did when you joined, and I honestly mean that in the nicest sense possible. Keep at it man. :y:
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby ChronicJon » Jun 8th, '10, 00:40

Solace wrote:
ChronicJon wrote:
E-40 wrote:Nikka talking bout guns. My nine is bigger than your whole leg. You can bet the bank on that.

lmao I dare you to write something half as good as this you little punk. Plus, when was i talking about guns? When I said I could die from some glock lead? Where I live it's likely. Homey, please fuck off and go WRITE some freestyles :laughing:

E-40's actually one of the best writers on this site. And yes, you CAN write freestyles, it's not all supposed to be off the top. It's freestyle, it's free of style. It can be quick, about anything, switching randomly, playing on certain topics only or practicing only wordplay or multies etc. And E-40 was just joking, no need to take it serious and start dissing.

But overall this was a pretty solid verse. You don't suck as much dick as you did when you joined, and I honestly mean that in the nicest sense possible. Keep at it man. :y:

Excuse my crackiness that day :sweating:

And thank you...the whole time I was "gone" i practiced on my writing....yes I am admitting I sucked dick a few months ago. Anyways thank you :y:


And sorry to E-40, homey I was just kinda angry that day. We're cool :b:
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Re: This Life I Lead

Postby Solace » Jun 8th, '10, 21:42

Haha well don't give up now. You got a lot of potential man...
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