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You Won't Stop Me

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You Won't Stop Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 9th, '10, 04:22

I'm the prize money honey you gotta contest to get me
give me shrooms cause it's the only way you'll trip me
but you, nah, I can sweep you off your feet
put you in a garbage bag
ain't you GLAD I'll leave you on the street?
everyone's fucking the world but they're getting sloppy seconds
cause I fucked that shit first and left it for 'em as a present
ya'll defect--here's an introspective lesson
ladies quit trying to impress em and quickly start undressin
and umm, gentlemen this here is for you
if you weren't clear as geyser I wouldn't see you see through
I grapple faggots on a pack of graph paper
so they do the math like my last haters
wait'll they calculate their percentage to live
and find out that it's less than triple nill
In my car don't put your feet on the dash dummy
or your feet will literally be on the dash running from me
ya'll would rather choke on a lie before you spit the truth
you're like Marshall Mathers on your case, your missin Proof


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Re: You Won't Stop Me

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jun 9th, '10, 04:32

That was mad sick Tash
from beginning to end I loved what I was reading
the part about Glad bags was sick
& that Eminem punch really ended the verse well :b:
good stuff...keep at it
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Re: You Won't Stop Me

Postby Emadyville » Jun 9th, '10, 04:54

I loved everything, the rhyming, the flow i got from it, the wordply and metaphors. Only thing i didn't like was the geyser line. overall this was dope, loved that dash line a lot :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: You Won't Stop Me

Postby classthe_king » Jun 9th, '10, 15:11

Good verse. I liked that em punch at the end :y:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: You Won't Stop Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 9th, '10, 17:20

thx men
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