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Practice Playground

Postby Solace » Jun 9th, '10, 01:23

Knew if there was any will in me the shit'll be vindicated,
Did the deed to free the evil genius, the Grim from hatred,
Back to rip the shit to blatant, pieces there's no ceasing,
Flow beating, hot summer need Coke like dope season,
Got quite no meaning, so fuck your existence man,
Kick your ass for resistance and see if you're persistent, damn,
Fuck Facebook-ing shit, like I give a fuck if you like this,
I'm lightning spitting raw, ain't missing y'all while writing,
I'm fighting time and time again even if my line is wack,
Fuck your opinion because it's my own rhyme to trash,
Smash, craft it back better and reveal my apocalypse,
Nobody stopping this, nada bitch, not even Anonymous,
Mastered attacks, I slaughter. Pussy? Well that is my past,
Jumped out the window of opportunity, fell flat on my ass,
Dinner Time but I'm still chewing down my lunch meat,
You ain't Royce with Street Hop, how you gunna jump me?
See it's you and I go, beefing on a do or die flow,
Note that attacking any of my lyrics is a suicide note,
Got the energy all through, I'm what ya enemies drawn to,
'Cause honestly obviously the center beef's not you,
I flip everything on you, 'cause you're no clever punk,
Try spitting at me after I leave your throat severed up,
Acting like I'd take ya shit, this is just a waste of diss,
How you gunna throw punches at me when I break ya fist,
Smash, get splattered, I'm just back and I'm and badder,
I hate y'all acts, baseball bats, ya raps getting battered,
You're just back to get shattered, that's the fact of the matter,
Battle pussy, too wack to push me, you're lackin' the power,
So with honest taste on this day I simply feel I ought to say,
You better eat your words, make sure it's all gone to waist,
Hottest like a sauna state. Risks? I'll eat and chop the stakes,
With my teeth, thinking I'll give up? Oh no well not today,
Your ears be bleeding. Why? Oh...It's the sound of truth,
Drank rat poison, induced it and spit it back out at you.
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Re: Practice Playground

Postby classthe_king » Jun 9th, '10, 15:14

This was alright. I like your emotional pieces alot better but you can't do those all the time. I know this was just practice but you have to find ways to make these kind of songs creative and original cause it got kind of boring.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Practice Playground

Postby Just Silver » Jun 9th, '10, 18:40

Delivery was nice
felt a little better than practice, well it all depends on how long you took so i have no idea

overall good shit :y:
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Re: Practice Playground

Postby classthe_king » Jun 9th, '10, 18:49

Just Silver wrote:Delivery was nice
felt a little better than practice, well it all depends on how long you took so i have no idea

overall good shit :y:


Do you know what delivery is?
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Practice Playground

Postby Just Silver » Jun 9th, '10, 18:59

classthe_king wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Delivery was nice
felt a little better than practice, well it all depends on how long you took so i have no idea

overall good shit :y:


Do you know what delivery is?

I might not :sweating: i just felt like it was set up where it sounded rhythmically nice
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Re: Practice Playground

Postby Solace » Jun 10th, '10, 00:29

classthe_king wrote:This was alright. I like your emotional pieces alot better but you can't do those all the time. I know this was just practice but you have to find ways to make these kind of songs creative and original cause it got kind of boring.

Thanks. I get what you mean. I'm at it.

Just Silver wrote:Delivery was nice
felt a little better than practice, well it all depends on how long you took so i have no idea

overall good shit :y:

By delivery, I'll assume you meant flow. Thanks. Took me like 15 minutes. I'm off my game, rusty.
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