FAME||Lights Camera Action

[FAME]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/770724836e583ecd/

Been busy kinda recently, but I have alot of material comming up soon I wanted to make just a fun track, actually Won't Back Down inspired me to write this track, feedback is loved and adored and of course I will feed you back I tried a new mixing style, I wonder if it sounds better Anyways, thanks for your 3 minutes of time listening

[gutawafang]

you sound so fucking good in this although the mixing is not so good. good try in mixing, I guess.

man, nice beat, nice motherfucking chorus. would be better if it's enhanced with more backup voices to make it sound more exciting.

man, I really really loved it!

collab!

[DƎRDYPK]

I agree wit Guta about this not being mixed the best
but WoW!
this is pretty dope
you got a killer flow wit them lyrics
keep up the work

[FAME]

you sound so fucking good in this although the mixing is not so good. good try in mixing, I guess.

man, nice beat, nice motherfucking chorus. would be better if it's enhanced with more backup voices to make it sound more exciting.

man, I really really loved it!

collab!

Thanks Guta, and we for sure would collab man Thanks for the feedback I understand what you say about the chorus too.

I agree wit Guta about this not being mixed the best
but WoW!
this is pretty dope
you got a killer flow wit them lyrics
keep up the work

Thanks PK I've been working on my flow since my last song.

Maybe it's because I'm using these huge ass headphones when I mix and record (only ones that reach that I have) but it sounds good on them but when I use my Ipod headphones it sounds shitty. Not sure, I'm gonna have to look up another tut and try it out, gotta find my mixing style

Thanks guys

[MC Anonymous]

Hmm...

Delivery could use work. You sound mad weird to me. You sound like Chambers if he was a girl. I say that because it's the only way I can describe it. It works for Chambers, but not for you much. Try to add more emotion into your voice.

Flow is very choppy, it could use a lot of smoothing out. Maybe add more syllables to bridge the pauses more smoothly. Try to make your words cohesive using different types of syllable sounds. It'll work out for you eventually if you keep practicing.

I enjoyed the hook, probably the best part of the song. However, it could've used layers. Possibly three. Overlays.

You're better than Tunisien so feel proud about that.

Good job here, if you ever need help structuring your lyrics PM me, I can help you out.

[Slim Zaddy]

actually i dont listen to women ,, but yeah i hev liked ya ,,, nice verses girl ,, hook was aight , not my type ,, ya second verse was tight ,, you need to put more emotions though ,, but ya no one is perfect but by practice i think you will dope Fame , keeeeep it up

[classthe_king]

Good job I agree with pretty much everything that anon said. Just keep working, I'm already seeing improvement. You're a newb just like me

[Le Tunisien]

Hmm...


You're better than Tunisien so feel proud about that.

wow...mentionning me haha
you seriously must have some mental issues ,good luck on that

[B.A.D.]

good beat choice I like it
you should post the lyrics bcuz sometimes with the quality is hard to get it all, either way

most of the track flowed perfectly, a lil more practice will get you doing a unique flow to distinguish you, but for now works great

the lyrics are good, I like them... on verse 3 I like autotune references and stuff, its good.

I liked it overall, the beat worked great with the whole concept of the song

"Student of the game".. nice

keep it up...

[j3andit]

YOO!!!!!


first of all...I really respect ya hustle...and to be COMPLTELY honest...I would replay this song many times over than ANY nicki minaj song


you wowwed me...like I don't even want to bring up the comment, "you're really good for a girl"....FUCK THAT--you're really good Period.


I like the hook, it's simple, but it's done really well...and it's catchy

*plays a second time*
okay it's official. if you're 18+ I have a crush on you.

either way this song is dope top to bottom, i'm not going to knock your quality cuz studio time isn't cheap..and mixing and mastering is higher level stuff, but for what you put down on the track, and the work you put on it, you really did a good job with it.

I was wondering...maybe you would want to do a track together? I'm pretty new to recording, I've got like 5 songs under my belt ring now, however I have over 300+ hours spent in a studio with other artists...so i know my way around some shit..


if u could plz check out the track I dropped.. i'm on the second verse
viewtopic.php?f=38&t=89443

anyways, get back to me by PM if you're down for a collab, I'll send you some better songs i've recorded

[FAME]

Thanks for all the feedback guys! I'll try to get to each of you on feedback as soon as I can (starting mma so I'm kinda busy at the moment) anyways once again thanks for the feed (yum :P) I love all the help I can get, because you always have room to improve oh and some of you wanted the lyrics, I think it's the most lyrical thing I've ever written so have a look

Got this in the bag, I’m in the market bitch
Dreaming dirty dough, so I’m wishing I’m filthy rich
Back of the textbook, I flow my vocab
A word terrorist, yeah I’m so bad
Line up the posers, I’ll be the firing squad
Too many look-alikes, I’ll shoot their fucking pods
You can have a huge ego, still be little David
You’re the imposter, I’m a monster, so save it
You’re a dog with no teeth, so stop fucking barking
Couldn’t bite the beef, so stop fucking starting
I bomb on these beats, yeah call me Saddam
Calling me out, is like starting up Vietnam
Break a promise, I cut your pinky off
Because I’m a girl, doesn’t mean I’m soft
Couldn’t match my skill, equal my ability
I rap three verses, yeah star of a trilogy

Lights camera action
The headline action
Fame, the reason why you came
Tearing up your faction
Lights camera action
Fame, student of the game

Horror movie style lines, sick and twisted
Trust me you signed up for this, you enlisted
Earache, listened too much to your bullshit
Talking lot, yeah but not really doing shit
My pencils are essentials, they are my ammo
Can’t see you, like your wearing fucking cameo
Rhymes are my disease, they stay like forever
Think you can out rule me? Better go and measure
I’m a prime example, of a sample of the best
Time for a showdown, like in the wild wild west
Your looking for an exit, or even and escape
You’ve licked the envelope, already sealed your fate
Letters at a theme park, very intense wordplay
Sentences riding rollercoasters, yeah I’m sure they
Roll out the red carpet, for a superstar
The sun of them all, yeah sure to go far

Lights camera action
The headline action
Fame, the reason why you came
Tearing up your faction
Lights camera action
Fame, student of the game

Music madness, they notes going crazy
I defuse a fogged mind, so my brain’s not hazy
I take a beat, and make it all my own
No help with it, I do it all alone
Redesign my brain, to make a fucking hot tune
Your skills more fake, than shitty autotune
Destroy you, yeah that’s what I outta do
Crush your vocal chords, you’ll sound like Lil Wayne
We are from the same town, but he fucked up the game
I can’t deal with people, blinded by the fortune
Your delivery, forced worse than a premature abortion
Look inside Fame, and you’ll find me
I’m a mic controller, a fucking MC
My best friend, gives me a special zen
The love of my life, yeah my pen

Lights camera action
The headline action
Fame, the reason why you came
Tearing up your faction
Lights camera action
Fame, student of the game

[Emadyville]

this definitely was solid. I liked it, especially the hook.

Like anon said, i think your syllable's need to be worked out better, as you can tell when you rush and try to get em all in a bar and then it becomes hard to understand. I liked the hook, overall it was pretty dope. also tho, like anon said, delivery could use work, but it definitely wasn't bad.

keep it up

[Xray]

You sound like you got a cock in your mouth.

[Le Tunisien]

You sound like you got a cock in your mouth.

fame is a girl

[Yah-hah]

Chorus was mad dope ma sorryI'm just now gettin around to checkin this. Sounds WAy better than the las time heard you. Keep doin ya thing girl