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I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 05:11

First song off my upcoming EP, this song and the whole ep are being recorded at a legit studio, so I hope you notice that...all feedback appreciated :y:

http://www.myspace.com/ddubswinch

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They say everyday’s a new day,
Well no shit,
Why you think I go spit,
Knowing that my mind flew away,
So whose to say that you can’t use a day,
To move away without a clue,
Looking for some new, music to make,
It doesn’t pay bills, no I ain’t rich,
I’m not broke but at the same time I can’t be fixed,
If you feel that, then you better react,
And give half on my behalf, because I…
Lead a life not receiving a hand out,
And life fucked me like I caught it with it’s pants down,
And I don’t understand how,
This whole world looks at me, like I don’t deserve that crown,
And I don’t really give a shit how that sounds,
The court can judge, before I step outta bounds,
And then, it’s all freewill,
Just a cheap thrill,
Cause life’s a walk in the park up a steep hill…

If everything was colored black and white like the fight,
In this, in this nonsense I call my life on the mic,
Then you wouldn’t say the lyrics be generic,
And now, as you stare it in the face I am faced to break...barracks,
And the merits I receive is like jumping off a terrace,
And surviving long enough to be...fearless,
It’s not the fairest, but all I gotta do is keep the spirit alive,
And when I die not...perish,
It’s inherent, I know about coherence,
So even when I sleep you know I keep awareness,
And I’ve said it before but don’t hear it,
I can’t erase the page and prolly cry if you’d tear it,
So I, guess the dreams just tempt me,
Only in knowin this will make me break me or end me,
And now it’s empty,
And it went, from a glass half full to a glass half emcee...
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Rollimeo » Oct 6th, '10, 05:58

that was great can't wait for the EP
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 05:59

Thanks guys, appreciate it :y:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 6th, '10, 06:01

pretty dope, i like the mood it sets, lovin the beat!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Oct 6th, '10, 06:08

link of feedback please or the thread will be locked until further pm'd
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 06:33

chambers wrote:link of feedback please or the thread will be locked until further pm'd


If you're asking for a link to feed I have given, I just fed Tash's new song, actually before I even posted this, I'm assuming that's what you mean :coffee:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 06:36

Kaotic wrote:pretty dope, i like the mood it sets, lovin the beat!


Thanks for the feedback man it's appreciated :y:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Mr. Chambers » Oct 6th, '10, 07:04

Emadyville wrote:
chambers wrote:link of feedback please or the thread will be locked until further pm'd


If you're asking for a link to feed I have given, I just fed Tash's new song, actually before I even posted this, I'm assuming that's what you mean :coffee:



^i'll let that slide this time, but next time link of feed in the first post please and a lil more detailed. :y:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Block » Oct 6th, '10, 07:49

Everything was on point except for your flow. Your flow was sloppy and all over the place.. But everything else was good, especially your emotion. The beat is amazing.
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby youngfire420 » Oct 6th, '10, 09:48

Lyrics - Perfect, loved them.
Flow - You rode the beat really nice man. Didn't really notice your fall off at all really.
Overall - 4.5/5. Nice hook and beat as well! Keep it up!

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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Robbie G » Oct 6th, '10, 13:22

I really enjoyed that man. I liked the lyrics and the quality was noticeably better.

Looking forward to the EP. :worship:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Nick. Y » Oct 6th, '10, 16:28

I think your performance was pretty tight, the chorus was interesting 'cause it has singing and I use this style in my songs too. I think the beat is missing something, an instrument or two, perhaps where the chorus stands in order to distinguish it more.Overall nice job Keep doin ya thing holms
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 18:06

Thanks to all 4 of you for the feed, glad you're all enjoying it :happy:
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby mcZu » Oct 6th, '10, 18:06

The flow is pretty on point in the first verse, your rhymes hit just before the snare, but your flow wasn't really smooth. Second verse had a pretty interesting flow, especially when you made the rhymes hit after the snare at some point. Again, not really smooth. But I don't think it's that big of a problem, 'cause it kinda suited the whole concept and instrumental. Delivery is a huge step up from your older work, you've made your voice into an extention of the instrumental, good improvement, bro. Lyrically it was good, no complains. Instrumental is incredible, I love the instrumental. And I love the quality, definitely something I'll be listening to on my mobile phone! Good job, Dubs.
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Re: I've Told Myself NEW D. Dubs

Postby Emadyville » Oct 6th, '10, 18:16

mcZu wrote:The flow is pretty on point in the first verse, your rhymes hit just before the snare, but your flow wasn't really smooth. Second verse had a pretty interesting flow, especially when you made the rhymes hit after the snare at some point. Again, not really smooth. But I don't think it's that big of a problem, 'cause it kinda suited the whole concept and instrumental. Delivery is a huge step up from your older work, you've made your voice into an extention of the instrumental, good improvement, bro. Lyrically it was good, no complains. Instrumental is incredible, I love the instrumental. And I love the quality, definitely something I'll be listening to on my mobile phone! Good job, Dubs.


Thanks a lot zu, I always appreciate your input on my material. I was trying to really switch the flow up on this, I have been trying to do this on all my shit now, not having flows repeat throughout and just kinda doing different shit. I'm glad you enjoyed it man, much appreciated :worship:
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