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Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '10, 00:22

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Writin at midnite like this is strange and embarassin,
If this Native American keeps playin with heroin,
He'll be up in the sky hangin with Marilyn,
He'll be danglin the chair and hangin to scare em then,
Cut the rope above his throat till the noise is deafened,
The needle pumps both the speakers up till it's destroyed in seconds,
Rejoice you're breatheless as your blood chokes in the blunt smoke,
I run so the dumb flow doesnt catch my head and everythin but the sun glow,
This dumb show I want no part in this garbage shit,
With shaky hands wait I'm shaking? Damn my arm just twitched,
Wat a heartless bitch like my heart was carved and stiched,
Refilled with harmless shit that started this but part was missed,
So I'm armed with this yellow venom at least its yellow tinted,
Hello misses, wait hell no this is me screamin while no fellows listen,
So much metal in my arm that you'll have to meld those stitches,
Velcro rippin through my flesh making you the dead,
Voices and different noises consume and remove my head to make my room a tomb my bed,
This is some bad trip........wait dad shit.........please Death don't laugh quit,
I'm almost past this..............but now I'm gaspin.............
Like God kicked the whole world into a backspin swear that shit just happened,
So now I'll.........close......my eyes..........try...........relaxin...............
Askin........why.....before I.......crash and die.............laughin........
Graspin God's hand holdin my life why'd I live in this dirt ashamed,
Sky dive into bright lights...........didn't know they were flames.......................
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '10, 00:47

Lol if Kaotic can flow to this than............
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '10, 01:01

With shaky hands wait I'm shaking? Damn my arm just twitched,
Wat a heartless bitch like my heart was carved and stiched,
Refilled with harmless shit that started this but part was missed,
So I'm armed with this yellow venom at least its yellow tinted,
Hello misses, wait hell no this is me screamin while no fellows listen,
So much metal in my arm that you'll have to meld those stitches,


loved that part...great drop
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '10, 01:24

Thanks G
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 9th, '10, 09:00

woooooooooooo........god damn you and your multis
you always putting down some impressive shit

I have nothing negative to say :y:
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 11th, '10, 02:35

Thanks for the feed. Yeah Steven I will sometime soon lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby classthe_king » Oct 11th, '10, 22:58

The begining was amazing lol, after that i had no clue what was going on, but I'm sure you got it ;)
Good shit though, keep reppin that black name :worship:
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 12th, '10, 00:42

lol thanks bro ya thats kinda the point ya know after awhile you dont know what the fuck is happening. Thanks for checkin homie. Black names in the buildin, yo we still gotta get that black name collab :smoking:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby classthe_king » Oct 12th, '10, 00:50

Yah-hah wrote:lol thanks bro ya thats kinda the point ya know after awhile you dont know what the fuck is happening. Thanks for checkin homie. Black names in the buildin, yo we still gotta get that black name collab :smoking:


Haha word, I'll hit you up with a verse when I have some free time. I got one other thing to write first though ;)
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 12th, '10, 01:08

Bet :D
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Just Silver » Oct 12th, '10, 19:59

Top notch as expected
Haven't really been feedin lately

I didn't know about the (.....) how it was supposed to go like
But it was well worth a read :y:

First line sort of made it have an uneasy vibe
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 13th, '10, 01:52

Just Silver wrote:Top notch as expected
Haven't really been feedin lately

I didn't know about the (.....) how it was supposed to go like
But it was well worth a read :y:

First line sort of made it have an uneasy vibe


Yeah thanks for the feed. the ......... are supposed to be pauses lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Just Silver » Oct 14th, '10, 00:13

Yah-hah wrote:
Just Silver wrote:Top notch as expected
Haven't really been feedin lately

I didn't know about the (.....) how it was supposed to go like
But it was well worth a read :y:

First line sort of made it have an uneasy vibe


Yeah thanks for the feed. the ......... are supposed to be pauses lol

I know but how long :sweating:
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 14th, '10, 06:02

lmao idk wait 1/8th a second per dot :p
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Stavros » Oct 14th, '10, 23:15

The rhymes were sick, the structure was very bad. Loved the imagery. Very fluent flow if you could line it correctly. I love your style. :y:
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