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Re: Dirty flames

Postby gutawafang » Oct 15th, '10, 10:15

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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 15th, '10, 21:34

Thanks to you three. Ya Starvos if you see anything else I've written i dont really pay much attention to my structure. I feel my multis help the average "structure" reading guy keep the flow. I just kinda write the way I hear it and I normally dont go back to proof my drops, I like to present them the original way i wrote them, unless the peice really is an important one to me. But thanks for checkin it everyone :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby mcZu » Oct 15th, '10, 21:58

Yah, why don't you start writing to beats? Because you're rhyming skills are ace, but you've to make it flow to a beat. And I would love to see you try some more wordplay.
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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 15th, '10, 23:04

Ya I know lol Idk why I just write better to silence ya know I'ma prolly start tho lol. and wordplay
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=94643 Awe once upon a time
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Dirty flames

Postby Yah-hah » Mar 5th, '11, 09:25

Sorry for bumpin old shit but fuck it
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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