Halfway Through

[Yah-hah]

Sittin at home from slavin with these 12 hour shifts,
Wrappin presents with a smile seems hell is our gift,
Haven't written a single word in hundreds of years,
I had to wait till my emotions became abumndant so here,
I'm Tryin to be a man, 'tryin' being the keyword,
Barely stringing my fingers just to see if these keys work,
Barely breathin screamin please work,
Tired of prayin my knees hurt and life still isn't that much better,
Prayin and askin for so long it seems my hands are stuck together,
My eyes closed in hope for so long I eventually fell into a deep slumber,
Workin so hard tryin to provide food for my deep hunger,
Because if I don't provide I'll die as nothin more than a weak hunter,
I run fast as I can but I'm stuck on the same road flyin past the street numbers,
How deep are the streets that we wonder?
When i scream thunder's released under the man-made band-aid i bleed under,
I ran all the way to the edge of sin but I'm still so small so I tip-toe,
Unable to win so I just let the wind blow till I'm thrown sideways from the hip throw,
From the shape that my lips go to the way that I shift slow,
The world makes a bitch out of me again like where the fuck did all of my ribs go?
Like the whole world just switched so I'm left with no balance,
At home writing slow ballads like shit this is no challenge,
Such a polite smirk of fake confidence resides on my facial structure,
Do you believe me when I smile and try to show you the way I love her,
Typing so humbly so I hope you don't mind my runny nose,
Fighting in bloody clothes rhyming but nothing shows,
Insecurely writing these scary thoughts so my raps stay true
I don't know how this story ends hopefully I'm just halfway through

[Yah-hah]

Almost forgot
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[Yah-hah]

Damn shits slow

[Sir_Machete']

Sounds like a topical piece brotha', very nice imagery man i was digging it throughout the read. Emotion was decent. Stayed well on topic Rhyme scheme/multies were nicely put too. 9.1/10 Overall no doubt on my top 3 favorite drops on this site.

[BILI]

That was awesome as always Yah...great multies,was powerful,and as Machete said imagery was

[Yah-hah]

Appreciate the feed homies

[ChristinaE12]

Another great piece. You never seem to fail there from what I've seen thus far.

I like how you kept one subject and point through the whole thing. Multi's were used through out and were decent too. Is very relatable and can tell this had lot's of emotion in it. I definitely like how you can do all of that without slipping elsewhere like most do. Really, the only thing I could see anyone say is even possibly negative.. Is at times, your lines get a little long. Which I do too. But I, myself, don't see that as negative. But it seems most usually do.

[Yah-hah]

Thanks too all, to D12, I have heard that since I started haha I change my lines up alot from short to fast but the multis help keep the flow, and I speed up and slow down at times. But yeah I used to drop almost a full song a day. But I work about 65 hours a week at an oil refinery so aint got much time ya know. but thanks for checkin everyone

[Arabian Shady]

Aiyo!
Dude this is just the kind of shit i dig...cat like!
lol im messin
Emotion, meaning and RAW lyricism, youre stuff allways has that, for real B, ive been a fan since day one, ive said this about steve and that was like a year back but YOUR shit inspires me to write again man, like if not on a similar topic then write JUST as good.
Keep doin your thing brotha!
Peace!

[Yah-hah]

Hahaha appreciate it Arab