Madness

[MikeNUFC]

Haven't wrote shit in ages due to lack of inspiration but just thought of the opening rhyme to this at about 3am last night haha and then typed it all up on my phone in about an hour. I realize the last line is kinda awkward but I can flow to it so...

Using my mind I can smash windows while twisting the glass
I'll shoot up a Catholic church and still sit at the mass
Kissing your ass, just to lock you away for a laugh
You'll be wishing so fast for freedom, time'll start to relapse
Fuck a brain to hold a info, I use my heart to store facts
Make the 6 million Jew stat seem a loving artifact
I can make you believe that words don't even exist
I tell you fog's our langauge - you start reading the mist
I can make the Queen turn gangster - "One is teefing ones whip"
While making the Bloods in New York turn a leaf with the Crips
Burn a chief constables hat for the hell of it
Then steal a brand new one... and sell him it
I tell him it's worth £10 grand and he fell for it
Love this wealthy shit, follow it by going off to make a rhyme
Sounds like Soulja Boy? I'll make you believe it's a Nas 'State Of Mind'

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[Innovation]

Decent verse.

Burn a chief constables hat for the hell of it
Then steal a brand new one... and sell him it
I tell him it's worth £10 grand and he fell for it

I laughed at this part, quite creative.

I felt as if the rhyming wasn't as solid as we've seen from your previous work. For example, this is probably just due to us having different accents, the "relapse" line didn't rhyme for me. Another example is how a few of your multi's continued to end with "it", it felt repetitive but didn't take much away from the verse.

Overall, it was a decent verse with some good lines such as the Nas/Soulja Boy one.

[MikeNUFC]

Cheers for the feed.

Another example is how a few of your multi's continued to end with "it", it felt repetitive but didn't take much away from the verse.

Yeah, but I woudln't really call that part multies.

It's just rhyming "hell/fell/sell/tell" - simple rhyming but because of the nature of the lines I didn't really feel it needed anything complex. Plus I had the "burn a chief/turn a leaf" rhyme in that part as well.

As for the relapse part, well it's not a solid rhyme but "ass/fast/lapse/laugh/facts" rhymes enough for me when I flow it.

[Xray]

Damn bro that was some good shit. Creativity was off the chain. Solid rhyming and solid verse, except the last line. It felt very awkward reading that Soulja Boy/Nas reference to end such a vivid verse. Just felt like your mind shifted back in to space and you fell asleep. Everything else was excellent.

I'll keep the madness jokes to myself.

[MikeNUFC]

Damn bro that was some good shit. Creativity was off the chain. Solid rhyming and solid verse, except the last line. It felt very awkward reading that Soulja Boy/Nas reference to end such a vivid verse. Just felt like your mind shifted back in to space and you fell asleep. Everything else was excellent.

I'll keep the madness jokes to myself.

Haha cheers man. Yeah I think it might be more to do with the fact the couplet is way too long in terms of syllables compared to the rest and I can see how it would ruin the flow.

[Edge]

Damn bro that was some good shit. Creativity was off the chain. Solid rhyming and solid verse, except the last line. It felt very awkward reading that Soulja Boy/Nas reference to end such a vivid verse. Just felt like your mind shifted back in to space and you fell asleep. Everything else was excellent.

I'll keep the madness jokes to myself.

Haha cheers man. Yeah I think it might be more to do with the fact the couplet is way too long in terms of syllables compared to the rest and I can see how it would ruin the flow.

i got it to flow, just sped it up a bit. if you spit it the right way it could be a hot line... i liked the whole thing overall and didnt think the "it" thing took anything at all away from it... good stuff

[MikeNUFC]

Damn bro that was some good shit. Creativity was off the chain. Solid rhyming and solid verse, except the last line. It felt very awkward reading that Soulja Boy/Nas reference to end such a vivid verse. Just felt like your mind shifted back in to space and you fell asleep. Everything else was excellent.

I'll keep the madness jokes to myself.

Haha cheers man. Yeah I think it might be more to do with the fact the couplet is way too long in terms of syllables compared to the rest and I can see how it would ruin the flow.

i got it to flow, just sped it up a bit. if you spit it the right way it could be a hot line... i liked the whole thing overall and didnt think the "it" thing took anything at all away from it... good stuff

Appreciated man.

[classthe_king]

This reminded me of some '99 Eminem big time haha, he deffinitely influenced it. Flow was smooth all the way through, I can see this going on a funny, Dre type beat. Some of the stuff I didn't get but that's probably cause I'm stupid. And word to the Catholic part in the begining, I fucking hate Catholics.