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Punchline 12- Feed me please

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Punchline 12- Feed me please

Postby ShaBruv » Jan 9th, '11, 02:15

Didnt really focus on flow or multis that much just tried to incorporate punches , hence the title

It is loosely to this beat:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=21_iKWr0p5I&feature=related

Though you have to speed up the flow unaturally at points :unsure:

You say i'm second best i say im just best twice
So don't expect less, yeah i take no respite

You in the dick lickin comptition with you hand on the balls
you're sure to win the cup and the gucci bag an' all

turn my volume up and your speakers down
fuck it i'll mute you all, and spit my ether now

my penis us so big it cause ass obstruution
divide the vagina, yeah call it maths(mass) destruction

I never tyre yeah a puncture still wont pop me
you can pin shit on me but you know you never will pop me

you're so fucking chewy and fruity you eat starburst
Man i even murk you backwords, seen ever i've bar worst


Explanation: 4th line- gucci is pronounced goochy, and we all know the gooch is the skin between the balls and the dick, and then "bag" as in nutsack. So overall he won the cup (cup the balls), and the gucci bag ( the goochy scrotum :confusion: )

I just realised how fucking gay these bars are like literally homo, ah well


Feedback Please

oh yeah and feeed:
http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=105249&p=1474251#p1474251
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Punchline 12- Feed me please

Postby ShaBruv » Jan 11th, '11, 00:38

bumpity bump
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Punchline 12- Feed me please

Postby ShaBruv » Jan 12th, '11, 00:44

bump/...
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Punchline 12- Feed me please

Postby Spyder » Jan 14th, '11, 05:20

didnt really feel any of these punches. all came weak for me, listen to a bunch of punch rappers dont bite bit see what they do. keep ya head up punches r great when u get em down
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