Just a 16

[Sam.]

Nice attempt ,did you write this over a beat 'cuz i slipped in places when i tried to flow ,
As always i have highlighted the best part i liked.

Relaxing after working the entire week prior
I was in a crummy cafe with dirty cheap tiles
Did a work shift, where I had to clean aisles
And clean the bathrooms, I had to sweep bile
Served by a waitress, a petite child
Peaceful and polite, she had a sweet smile
Spat my drink out, "Bitch, I like my tea mild
You better serve a better one 'cause I can be vile
And make sure you get it done, I can beguile
Plus I'm a pedophile, check my police file"
"I thought you were in jail!" "I had a re-trial"
Poured the mug on her, chased the girl for three miles
I can be wild, check my lyric sheet pile
It's a stack of blank paper, this is a freestyle
And meanwhile, my grandpa is senile
That's why I've got retirement homes on speed dial

[classthe_king]

What inspired this

[Ka0t1c]

i like it for what it is.... good rhymes and how u did it, just too sporadic, just didn't have any sense to it...

[HipHopHead]

I totally fuckin forgot about our collab man. My mom had a minor surgery so she's been at home and I haven't been able to record. My bad bro.

This was fuckin beautiful minus the last two lines though. I'm jealous.

[ArsheyHaq]

Haha enjoyed that read too, for what it is.. I think if you recorded this, it'd come off stronger! I really liked how you rhymed the whole thing through with just that rhyme, reminded me of Em's 3rd verse on 'Insane'

[VenomBlackViper]

This is fucking hilarious, i'm gonna try to find other threads by you in creative writing. I should've expected you to write seeing as how you're so good with multis.