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Underground King (Part 1)

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Underground King (Part 1)

Postby classthe_king » Feb 27th, '11, 00:32

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=108664

I was forged in the dark fire pits of Agartha
As a heinous king with a vile fist to massacre
I was raised by the whips of savager
Creatures then your mind could begin to fathom up
I was the last one of my race of black mutants
With a heart made of tar and the face of Rasputin
I leave through the core and climb through the mantle
As I reach to the floor and rise to the mammals
I breach the surface then unleash the serpents
Killing my foes and turning the weak to servants
My speech is worship by the jungle’s local tribes
Who bow down to the ferocity of my vocals vibe
Any hopeful rise is crushed and put in the skies
I disintegrate challengers who look in my eyes
Statues are made which show me depicted as god
With my foot on the beast before I ripped it apart
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Underground King (Part 1)

Postby Mahmoud48 » Feb 27th, '11, 00:37

I find this very good
i like it :y:
Last edited by Mahmoud48 on Feb 27th, '11, 00:45, edited 1 time in total.
ODD FUTURE ASAP OVOXO BLACK HIPPY GOOD MUSIC
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Re: Underground King (Part 1)

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 27th, '11, 00:40

Rhyming was solid. Probably a bit better than solid, actaully. I found your flow a bit sloppy but I can't really use that as a complaint because I'm sure you've got it fine in your head and that's whats important.

Found the content pretty dull, but that's just personal taste.


Btw I was wonderinig you wanted to do a text collab - content like this - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5O0UJpf3Fjs - I always found the second verse of this to be much weaker than the amazing first; it always pissed me off that's what I wanted to write a verse for that concept (would like to write to the beat but cant find an instrumental)

Don't worry if not, I'll probably write something for it anyway.


Mahmoud48 wrote:its good but it lacks something
i feel that its not making me BALLIN UNCONTROLLABLY

Fuck off back to the Eminem section with that shit.
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Re: Underground King (Part 1)

Postby classthe_king » Feb 27th, '11, 00:44

Yeah I would be down for that, I don't know when I'll write it though cause I've got audio collabs to work on too and those are a little more important lol.

And I wish I was a mod just so I could delete bullshit posts like that from my threads.
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Re: Underground King (Part 1)

Postby MikeNUFC » Feb 27th, '11, 00:46

classthe_king wrote:Yeah I would be down for that, I don't know when I'll write it though cause I've got audio collabs to work on too and those are a little more important lol.

And I wish I was a mod just so I could delete bullshit posts like that from my threads.


No rush. It'll probably be a few weeks for me anyway.
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