Bring The Ruckus {Fictional Story}

[WakeUpShow]

weren't u the one talking about how noone wants to read my writing threads

[WakeUpShow]

weren't u the one talking about how noone wants to read my writing threads

that was a rap battle , man .. shit is all for fun and ain't serious
so chill the fuck out , why you mad?

now take the argument here : http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php? ... 7&start=15

lolz i aint even mad, just joking around

[classthe_king]

ummmm...is this rap?

[classthe_king]

Well you need to rhyme for one

[classthe_king]

The only lines that rhymed were

so he apologized , and said he was zoned out
and the big guy pushed him into the ground

so he stood up again , put his hand in his jacket's pocket
then grabbed a 9cm knife and they said "oh just stop it

so stabbed the big guy and his arm was bleeding
and they all ran away when they heard the police beeping

and so one of the guys was just up to no good
went to the car and grabbed a glock from the hood

put it into the bag and hoping he'll meet those guys
so he did leave the house hoping they wont survive


in case the story wasn't clear for your heads
the little kid stole a gun from his house and left
and nothing good has happened but getting his dad dead
this aint a funny story so dont dare to laugh
i'm not proud i wrote this song about the wrong path

[classthe_king]

I wouldn't even work on multis, just try and use one syllable rhymes at this point.

And the story was alright, it needs better vocab and imagery though