I'm Ill (Remix)

[garycal5326]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MNLffPMNuKk

A new track I made on the beat for Red Cafe ft. Fabolous - "I'm Ill"

Please tell me what you think, criticism, tips, etc.

I also have some tracks on that YouTube channel under a different name (Bubbie Iwok), which is an Indian guy that I made up while joking around with friends.

Thanks


Lyrics:

Verse 1
I'll stab you, after I drive by and grab you
Out the car window, you suck like a vacuum
Adn I will attack you, rip out your liver
And this kid's got a sticker, so I kick you to quiver
Kick you to make you quiver, what I really meant to say
but you're really actin' gay, so I'll kill you anyway
any day, but only Sunday, Tuesday, Friday
This guy say, but all he wants to do is violate
My space, which is personal to me
And it's hurtin' him to bleed, so I murk him in the street
While I'm working on this beat, to try to kill it slowly
and my skillet is lonely, I need some balogna
to griddle and cook, I got you shiver and shook
With the way I rhyme, it's like I gave her a look
It's not a gimmick I took, my cheeseballs and shook
the bag, dumped them in the street like a crook

Verse 2
You can love me or hate me, but it's not lovely to make me
mad, so try it and I'll run through your state see
with my AK, so to stay safe
Wear your bulletproof vest, and stay indoors every day
Well anyway, back to what I was sayin'
I runied my PlayStation, by doin' kung fu things and
knock it downand smash it, it looked like I attack it
but this didn't even happen, cuz it's just a rap bitch
So I ad-lib, stupid ass lyrics
They do this so I fear it, but I'm new so I stay near it
I'm cupid, now you hear it and you're loving all my rhymes
You get my CD bootlegged from your cousin all the time
I'm runnin' with my rhymes, you are not a track star
I'll leave you with a scar, the size of a tucan
You're really rude Dan, auctioning my newsstand

Verse 3
My rhymes are hotter than the devil, so I rock it heavy metal
To get revenge on tea, I fought it in the kettle
I'm on the next level, when it comes to flow and rhymes
And I knew it this time, so I'll go and climb
Mount Everest, to prove that I can do it
I knew it, I knew that I could ruin
My storytelling rhymes, by getting off topic
I'm lettin dogs bark at, and microscopic
rapper, let's see if they'll bite em
I know they'll bite my rhymes, but that's a different item
I might as well, tell you what I do
Kill every beat, that I walked up to
I am coming though, ill as can be
I am hungry right now, what a meal is to me
A meal to me right now would be like a million bucks
I know your feeling dumbstruck, but shut the fuck up

[B.A.D.]

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