Nefarious - My Past

[Nefarious]

http://hulkshare.com/beq2jgc9b6ct

Tell me what you think, im pretty content with how this turned out in the ending.

Lyric's ---v

Chorus

It isnt what i normally want, but everday i feel im running from my past.
Even if i cant go in the front, i know that i can always, come in through the back.

1st Verse

Can we all get along for second or three.
I wanna say to everybody that im nef and im serious.
That i'll wreck you with lyrics, theyre like a weapon to me.
I'll make a miracle without even possessing a spirit.
Your destined to hear and you know i wont accept interfearance.
I take a step to be the best and when i get to the clearance.
I'll be responsable for all that i regret and an obsticle.
Never bothered me ever, as i attempt the impossible.
Im addicted to the rhythm im wicked and you can witness.
Im vicious, and unpredictable, contradictable sicker.
Than anybody there is and i know that im not invincable.
Is there a way to make it or is it already simple.
Or was it i wasnt able to see what i really wanted.
And i'll never find a way to be free and i'll still be haunted.
Forever, im at the bottom and its harder than ever.
Ive got a feeling i believe in, in my heart i can better.

2nd Verse

If i'd only get a chance i would never have missed it.
Cause ive given up so many i should never exist.
If i could ever resist this fuckin feeling i get.
My feet are stuck to the floor, but ive been dreaming ahead.
And where im going i'll need to be on the ceiling insted.
So i dont know if i can reach for what i see in my head.
But i know everything i speak is what i'll be when im dead.
So i'll be happy at the ending as i scream and i bled.
But i would never stop rappin, ever, its not happenin.
When im shot down, i get up and drop laughin.
Every little negative thought, im in the middle.
And i wonder when i'll get to the top, i lost track.
Im trapped in sad thoughts, imagining what it's like.
To be in a good mood, and whether im interested.
Whatever i should do, is never the right way.
Either isnt what i wanted, or wasnt a nice day.

Verse 3

I live in an illusion, why do i sleep, losing.
All that i have, while im in a deep confusion.
And im weak but im choosing to keep it movin.
Cuz everyone of you, still needs improvement.
And it goes for me to, i hope to meet you.
Where noone can compare to the flows that we do.
And everyone is scared of a ghost i see through.
Anything i approach and im close in three, two.
One, i get to where i was going without knowing.
If i wasnt where you thought i would be i was out growing.
There's never a doubt showing, Im free to be there now.
Even if im looking into the mirror i stare down.
The person i see is someone who was worse in my dreams.
I show no mercy i reverse it when im hurt or in need.
I try to make it picture perfect and im certain it seems.
That even if im living cursed i'll be the first to be seen.


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[Mr. Chambers]

Ok
The positives are:
The flow like always was pretty Dam smooth. I like how you keep a constant pace with your flow and able to insert your heartfelt lyrics in with it and make it soun good.
The chorus was ok but it gets old real quick.

Some food for thought:
Out of all the songs I heard from you, you have a problem switching up. From the beat selection, to the flow, to the lyrics, to the choruses. Now your still newish, but you got to try to keep your listeners guessing or else youll get faded out real quick. Try little things like different types of beats.

Not hating just making a thought

[Nefarious]

Thanks alot for the advice, it might just be the beats i feel more comfertable writing on or sumthing, i may have only about 40 ish comments on trshady, but ive been rapping for about 6 years now, so the ammout of beats ive written on is unimaginable, and im really picky with the instrumentals i choose, even i myself thought the chorus was kind of simple and not very catchy but that chorus came to my head in like 2 minutes and i decided to stick with it cuz i couldnt think of anything to go well with it or anything better than it lol, i got more song's comming eventually like always could be a catchy chorus or 2 in the next few songs, but the verse's will always be solid and slaughtered lol thanks again.

[WesTMusiK]

Oh hot damn, I love this joint homie.

The flow is amazing, the rhyming is dope as hell and the hook is very intriguing.

The only complaint I really have is the flow, although amazing, is too consistant if that makes sense. You never seem to switch up the flow and that makes it old after awhile. But other than that shit, amazing track man!

[Tash8]

Some food for thought:
Out of all the songs I heard from you, you have a problem switching up. From the beat selection, to the flow, to the lyrics, to the choruses. Now your still newish, but you got to try to keep your listeners guessing or else youll get faded out real quick. Try little things like different types of beats.

Not hating just making a thought

naw that's perfect, you read my mine.

I agree Nef, you easily one of the most ready rappers on this forum, but you just need some range now. Slow up ur flow occasionally, switch beats, switch singy-songy chorus. It'll help you grow out of your comfort zone

with that said. This is a dope song!

[Nefarious]

It all depends on the beats i download, to be honest, there arent enough good instrumentals for me to be able to change up my style, i always find a certain type of beat because its the only kind of beat i can stand to listen to and to many people put tag's in there beats these days, expecting you to buy the beat, when in reality my lyrics are what makes the beat in the ending so i should be getting payed lol. every good beat these days you gotta pay for, or i just havent been looking in the right places.