Kez wrote:I have no idea why Scrubz would diss you lmao or what any of the backstory is on this, so forgive me.
The beat is absolutely beautiful. Love the horns in it and in general it just has a really humourous feel to it. I dunno if your delivery really took advantage of that as well as it could have though. Your overlays sound a bit bored at times lol. Your delivery is clear enough and the quality's fine though.
Honestly I thought the flow sounded like very little pre-planning was really put into it. For one thing there's no structure to end the verses, you just kinda stop when you feel like it and let the beat play for a sec before going into the next verse. Plus sometimes you just rap way out of any kind of structured time with the beat. I'm sure you will say that's what you were going for and fair enough, but for me I just found it a bit annoying. At other times though the flow was dead on, and reading the lyrics reminds me of something I always noticed with Maybe, which is that you can see how the words flow well just by reading them in your head. Wasn't a fan of how you just cut the last two verses by making your last lyrics echo, just sounds lazy to me personally.
The lyrics were decent for Internet beef, obviously with shit like this a lot of it depends on how serious you take it. It's hard to efficiently diss someone you don't really know. I mean it is kinda like you just took several things you could latch onto (i.e. the vet shit, the Scrubs references) and used that because there is little else to really say past "you suck". This isn't any slight against you personally, it's just this is normally what happens in Internet beef and it doesn't leave much room for maneuver. Stephen King line was probably the best one.
I also was a bit dissapointed you didn't use some voice clip of Cox as the intro or outro, no big complaint I just would have found that funny and it would have fit with the title.
It was a decent track, and I can't comment on who's "winning", since I have no idea about this shit, but yeah.
Fuck you, you're wrong. You can't rap.
Lol, thanks for the critique man. I always respect your opinion in this area. You're right, there wasn't any pre-planning with the flow. And the bars did stretch a lot. I don't tend to plan out a flow unless I'm doing a real song. Stuff like this is 'ehhh' to me. Ya know? But I do agree that the bars could've ended better with the last two verses. The thing with that is that this was written as one continuous verse, and I only broke it up because the chorus part of this beat would've have severely over-powered the vocals.
As far as the structured time for the beat: That's a style I've come to take on. It's something I've
learned, or picked up rather, from listening to artists like Slug and Spoonfull. Some people don't like it (I didn't at first), because to some it sounds sloppy. And I can understand that... I just like to have my own flavor, as far as flow and such is concerned. The whole, "Stop. Go. Stop. Go" with every bar, doesn't appeal to me.
Again, thanks for the critique bro. I appreciate it. I'll be sure to return it either tonight or tomorrow. I want to give as solid feed as you have, so it may take a minute.
