Cosh vs. B. Nutz' writing wrote:I'll leave my hatred of you out of this and critique it like a real piece
*clears throat*
You didn't rhyme at all in the entire piece except for maybe 4 bars. In your one line "He ain't gonna say shit, yeah fuck that snitch" you made absolutely zero sense. If I don't say shit how am I a snitch. You said "Fuck Cosh" or some variable of that line about 10 or so times which shows a lack of variety and lack of personal disses. You also didn't make sense in the line "Smaller than cosh's Ripped to Shreds". That drop was a 16, the average length of a hip-hop verse. And then another line:
Fuck himand his daughter, and his cock bro,
Uhhhhh....no homo?
Over half of your lines were run-on sentences which made your flow suffer. But that doesn't matter because your regular size lines have the shittiest flow anyway.
Hey yo, this is my love song,
oh wait, no it ain't fuck that shit,
Show her the bait, then abduct that bitch,
It's not rape, It's a fucked up witch,
who is "her" ? By the way, the first line doesn't rhyme with the next three. You can't rhyme three lines, it has to be a multiple of two, ex. 2,4,6,8,10 etc. Your vocab was basically nonexistent and there was no personal disses just general battle rhymes. If you hadn't used my name, I would have had NO idea who you were dissing.
In conclusion, I don't know if you're ready to run with the big dogs. Good try though.