My Disturbingly Vivid Fantasy

[Ticalrecords]

heres my proof of feedback viewtopic.php?f=38&t=124585

and here's my song, its a love song. tell me what yall think


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EuRhqYn5voY

[Eedee]

The beat was great, I just didn't think it suited the subject matter of drugs and swag. It sounded like a diss track beat in all honesty. At times your voice kinda faded when it wasn't supposed to, like when you said "street grab compared (?)" in the verse 2 around 1:11. Does that a quite a bit in the song, and it detracts from the overall enjoyment of it. You're all over the place with the lyrics, which is fun to do once in a while. Your voice was better than the last song I listened to off your EP. Good job, will definitely listen to your next piece!

[gutawafang]

Didn't exactly like it. It's the kanye west song, isn't it? heard the beat before. the imagination was good. your delivery is like hopsin's

[Kez]

Beat is alright, i'm not really a fan of Kanye. And the title does reek of Kanye, i'm not aware if the beat is his or not I don't listen to him now.

Your delivery sounds like it wants to be Watsky, it's that deadpan kind of excitement. At first I didn't think it worked (like the "fuck an intro" sounded outta place), but by the second verse I thought it was alright actually. If you tighten up your flow and make yourself a bit louder it'd work for you.

Lyrics were alright, "random" is the word that jumps out to me though. A beat like this with that title sounds like it should be some weird dark kind of shit, but you seem to just be rappin about getting high and humurous shit like that. The rhymes were good though.

The flow was alright, but on the second verse it was way off lmao. Work on that shit.