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Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Mr. Chambers » Sep 15th, '11, 23:29

http://www.reverbnation.com/#!/tomchambers

its the first song. check it out i'm trying to improve on my delivery and flow, so those are my two main focuses....

really would appreciate feedback and will RTF

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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 15th, '11, 23:41

Pretty good track for what it is. Lyrics are on track but for the flow I couldn't help but think of Jay-Z and Eminem; can't put my tongue on it but I feel like they've both used that flow before, maybe you used it subconsciously? Delivery was pretty solid, a few slip ups throughout but nothing that ruins the song. I thought the tone you used was pretty good as well, suited the type of track.

Overall it's nothing outstanding to my ears but I think it's a good pump-up song, I can honestly say I enjoyed listening to it. Keep it up T.C.
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby B.A.D. » Sep 19th, '11, 08:18

Been listening to this ever since I saw it on facebook.

I gotta give you some feed on the mixing tho, the vocals were a bit too low, just a little but enough to be too low, and Also I think the reverb is a bit too wet probably, try it a little more dry.

I like the "they know, they know' part :worship:

But fucking beautiful verses and hook :worship: how do you download them from Reverbnation?

the flow and writing on the second verse is extraordinary, I was fucking headbangin to where you pick up the speed... dopeness :worship:
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby mdemaz » Sep 19th, '11, 08:49

Good looks breh, maybe turn down the strings a lil' bit, hahah.

When the kick and snare come in, the track goes nuts..

Solid track, I'll be looking forward to your next song.
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Vettori » Sep 19th, '11, 19:17

qualitys clear. Flows good. I hate that its a remix reminds me alot of the original.
seemed like it kept goin , It began to sound the same throughout the verse despite the words were differant. You changed it up on the second verse. Pretty good track still.
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Mr. Chambers » Sep 21st, '11, 22:12

good looks broskis
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby B.A.D. » Sep 23rd, '11, 04:36

bumpin this for Mr. C :y:
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Tash8 » Sep 23rd, '11, 05:29

ok well i thought drake rode this beat real well so let me see what u do. I think the part without the drums, you gotta emphasize your rhymes just a bit more. flow is pretty swift, but god damn you're "they know, they know" is fuckin awful hahah so is that "dont fuck with our team, cause we're not as nice as we seem" lyrics are cool but its too me cause I blah blah and you blah blah...rhymes are nice tho.

Top spot, on lock :laughing: :laughing: :laughing: :laughing:

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i'd like some feed on jagged pill if you may, plz n thank you
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Mr. Chambers » Sep 25th, '11, 01:59

thanks tash and i got you either tonight or tomorrow after work...i listened to the first verse of it
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Re: Headliner (NMD)-Tom Chambers NEW!

Postby Kez » Sep 25th, '11, 02:02

This just wasn't my kinda shit, sorry man haha.

The beat annoyed me. These kinda songs just aint my kind of thing.

But for the record, you flowed on the beat pretty great. And your delivery was fine, I understood all the words. Your singing was a bit off lol but w.e.

Lyrics had good rhymes and shit, can't fault them. The content was more braggadocio shit which aint my thing but you do it well for the record.
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