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Creative Differences (Featuring B.Nutz)

Postby Atone » Oct 5th, '11, 23:11

(Intro)(B.Nutz)
You think youre clever? Finally writing a diss track while I'm banned?
You must either be pissed or mad, I figured I'd write back when I can

(Verse)(Atone)
Damn, no challange i won't accept, time to put some asses in check
some wack emcee's about to get wrecked
left for dead better protect ya head
my bars disect ya cred-
i don't need to write, i don't care for pen's
i embarass men who ask where ya been
subliminally fire shots cuz ya scared of him
sad to see everybody B on ya Nuts
cuz you runnin the show but nobody would give a fuck
if you was one of us, they'd be straight and say you suck
you played ya luck, get dismayed i decay ya guts

(Chorus)
~Atone~ What's The difference between me and you?
~B.Nutz~ creativlely i walk on everything you do
~B.Nutz~ whats the difference between the two of us?
~ Atone~ i blow minds when i throw rhymes- you just suck
~B Nutz~ whats the difference between me and you?

(Verse)(Atone)
look in the mirror, stop actin like you the shit
you just a bitch, man these guys make me sick
bitch crews who got nothin to do
writin weak shit, rushin it thru
so now i'm crushin em, bustin it loose
flushin these jews
you an anal baby, ya mama was a greesy hoe
you grew up to be a bitch makin up cheesy flows
i'm pickin this clown, cuz he's the type to kick em when thye down
attackin Bnutz, listen up you little bitch sit down
i got you so gassed you passin out
Trash talkin wack rappers who actin out
action now, boy you thinkin you manny pacquiao
i don't think i should, but i may weather his ass and attack em now

(Outro)(B.Nutz)
Leave these bitches laughing out, Geno you little bitch it's time to bow







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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Mr.DGAF » Oct 5th, '11, 23:36

This was okay. I really like the chorus, that's my favorite part of the entire thing. Not to say that the verses dissapointed, because they didn't. Shots fired the whole way through, maybe some beef is brewing in the CW Section. For the verses, the rhyming was a bit ehh. The structure makes it kind of hard to pick up a flow, too. The verses are also pretty short, which is no biggie I suppose.

Overall, it's decent. It feels a tad bit rushed, but the message is certainly delivered, and I'm hoping this is the start of something big, battle wise. :y:
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 5th, '11, 23:46

...I knew this was coming. I liked the chorus and it wasn't until I saw that when I realized you guys were using the What's The Difference instrumental. The verses do seem a bit rushed and a bit sloppy with rhyming, but nothing to trip over. The flow was confusing at first, but picked up after, which I liked. Good job, though and keep at it. Let's see Geno's response to this.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Atone » Oct 5th, '11, 23:50

JamaicanPattlez wrote:...I knew this was coming. I liked the chorus and it wasn't until I saw that when I realized you guys were using the What's The Difference instrumental. The verses do seem a bit rushed and a bit sloppy with rhyming, but nothing to trip over. The flow was confusing at first, but picked up after, which I liked. Good job, though and keep at it. Let's see Geno's response to this.


He'll ban me before he responds, thats his M.O
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 5th, '11, 23:53

Atone The Underdog wrote:
JamaicanPattlez wrote:...I knew this was coming. I liked the chorus and it wasn't until I saw that when I realized you guys were using the What's The Difference instrumental. The verses do seem a bit rushed and a bit sloppy with rhyming, but nothing to trip over. The flow was confusing at first, but picked up after, which I liked. Good job, though and keep at it. Let's see Geno's response to this.


He'll ban me before he responds, thats his M.O

You're beefing with him too? Lol what's going on? Lots of people going at him lately.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Atone » Oct 5th, '11, 23:57

JamaicanPattlez wrote:
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JamaicanPattlez wrote:...I knew this was coming. I liked the chorus and it wasn't until I saw that when I realized you guys were using the What's The Difference instrumental. The verses do seem a bit rushed and a bit sloppy with rhyming, but nothing to trip over. The flow was confusing at first, but picked up after, which I liked. Good job, though and keep at it. Let's see Geno's response to this.


He'll ban me before he responds, thats his M.O

You're beefing with him too? Lol what's going on? Lots of people going at him lately.


Me and B.Nutz are cool, Geno went at B.Nutz in one of his drops AFTER B.Nutz got banned, so there was no way he could respond, to me, thats a dick move, so of course i'm gettin in on this, i don't have any real life issue's with him, he's probably a chill guy when he's not on the computer.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 00:00

Okay, well let's see what'll happen next, I'll be watching!
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Sam. » Oct 6th, '11, 12:04

This was weak tbh ,if he wants a beef or Battle with Geno tell me I'll make the arrangements.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Atone » Oct 6th, '11, 14:00

Sam. wrote:This was weak tbh ,if he wants a beef or Battle with Geno tell me I'll make the arrangements.
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weak? lol of course you'd say that, nobody on this site exept for 1 or 2 ppl have ever gavepositive feed to anything i'v done, and i'v caught some people just giving feed without even reading, so basically you all enter my threads and without checking anything you automaticly hate.

what's funny is i get hate here but for some reason, the downloads on all my mixtapes continue to grow, the downloads from "Monster" have tripled the ammount of Downloads from "The Evolution Effect", in only 1 month

the downloads for my newest mixtape, are already equal to Monster, within 1 week, and still growing,

not to mention, there's people i'v never met in my old home state (Iowa) that are bumping my music, i'v had friends tell me how they hear random people playin my songs at times, so maybe the negitive bullshit from people on this site is based on how bad i was in the beginning, so they automaticly discredit me, so sorry guys, but there's hundreds of people that say your wrong.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby mdemaz » Oct 6th, '11, 14:26

Wish everyone would just get along..
Of course Atone is gonna stink when he starts out...You guys should check out my 2006 shit when I finally drop it, it's horrid.


As for the piece, good looks, but I can see a few things wrong with it.
Short bars means your going to be rapping slow or pausing during the flow..So...

I understand it's a diss track..So...Eh...
I guess you could improvise.

Lemme know if you wanna write some shit with me Atone..

I might be doing a mixtape next year with lyrical themes based on songs like this one...

Or...Not...I dunno what the fuck is gonna happen..
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby Sam. » Oct 6th, '11, 18:48

What's wrong with you man ? I barely know or interact with you to hate you in the 1st place man.Chill ,check through the pages I gave you a +ve feed and you returned me feed.When I said weak i meant that you & B.Nutz could have come in even more harder tbh.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 19:05

There's a lot of hostility on TR as of late, damn. I was gonna drop something tonight, but I'm not even sure if I should and apparently GT is temp-banned (What'd he do?) so Trio can't drop for a bit... wow.
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Postby Sam. » Oct 6th, '11, 19:08

JamaicanPattlez wrote:There's a lot of hostility on TR as of late, damn. I was gonna drop something tonight, but I'm not even sure if I should and apparently GT is temp-banned (What'd he do?) so Trio can't drop for a bit... wow.

I'm there to feed brah ! :smoking:
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Postby SG. » Oct 6th, '11, 19:09

JamaicanPattlez wrote:There's a lot of hostility on TR as of late, damn. I was gonna drop something tonight, but I'm not even sure if I should and apparently GT is temp-banned (What'd he do?) so Trio can't drop for a bit... wow.


Where's my verse? :whistle:
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Creative Differences (Featuring B.N

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 19:12

Sam. wrote:
JamaicanPattlez wrote:There's a lot of hostility on TR as of late, damn. I was gonna drop something tonight, but I'm not even sure if I should and apparently GT is temp-banned (What'd he do?) so Trio can't drop for a bit... wow.

I'm there to feed brah ! :smoking:
GT is banned for using the N word.



Aight homie! Wait, really? Seems like everyone's going down for that... It feels empty. :'(


Ah shit Zabe LOL, my bad. Hmm.. you know, I should finish that up.
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