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Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby Spyder » Oct 6th, '11, 20:49

Ill son you on a track so that, means that this is dad abuse
Left this so-called text action douche, head strapped in noose
Dead black and blue pronounce ya vet status bruised,
Don’t get sour with me cause you have fake ‘passion, fruit.’
Do you ask to lose? didn’t learn from tourneys, left your ass dismayed
Came on trash this place, actin tough this is no masquerade.
Lets step back a day, Viper came correct you prissy with long hair
The second you stepped you coulda guessed you don’t belong here.
I don’t know what your so cocky about cause you still aint winnin
When I saw your drops I gave those Men-a-pause like middle aged women!
I spray Venom like Black Viper, Geno im more than a tad nicer
I cant hold a flow? Homie you polio, lame and don’t match Spyder.
This Canadian kid claimin he battle hard, bitch I give you battle scars
My eight limbs leave this fake bitch face split like his avatar.
Spyder… ya you two be the flies, this is G demise this is practice come to me
Cause kid after we spit im bound to leave you Job-less like Apple Companies!!
Your tracklist just stuns me, I have yet to see that you’re a clever or deadly
Why don’t you try touchin on a topic that I havent done better already, haha
On your dick, ha your on mine and cant stay off it, I take it this is his newest try
These new age all shit, if you claimin Chaos, Kid itll prolly end in Suicide…
Im the teacher bro, you the student so there no point of you testin me
My flows a show stopper and im so hot that even the Devil be sweatin me,
Sure lets compete, youll never contend with the weaponry
Ill slit your chest so we your true stripes on your vest like referees.
How is it you manage to renew the same shit that has been done to the death
My status… shit im clearin fame cause Players Fear my Game, Russian Roulette!
Im guessin your family status effected your appearance, but you wont see my sources
So believe me when I say your like Caylee Anthony, better off bein Orphaned!
Or maybe even aborted, whatever stops your shit from bein recorded
Try to make a name for his group so dissin me is where he resorted.
Bitch please, even if you tried couldn’t mimic me, your shits whack
Compared to me, my shits so Dope I had to take a Piss Test to diss back,
If this beef continues expect people to bow their heads in steeples
Cause ill end you like a death row victim, sept with a venom injected record needle!

You really want it bro… ooooooook


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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 23:15

You really know how to stretch your bars, man. How do you do that? I liked the content, because as it seems, things are getting real interesting. I can't really flow to large bars yet, so I can't comment on that and the rhyming's pretty good too. A lot of nice references put in, so that was nice reading. Excited to see what happens next! :y:
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 23:19

Geno wrote:
JamaicanPattlez wrote:You really know how to stretch your bars, man. How do you do that? I liked the content, because as it seems, things are getting real interesting. I can't really flow to large bars yet, so I can't comment on that and the rhyming's pretty good too. A lot of nice references put in, so that was nice reading. Excited to see what happens next! :y:

Because he doesn't write to a beat. :laughing:


He doesn't? Ohh... I thought he was just able to stretch his bars somehow, I didn't even know how he could.
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 23:24

Geno wrote:You can't really. Try it with any beat and it would sound rushed or forced.

The only way it's possible is by breaking them up into smaller bars the way Eminem and Royce do. It sounds like have a really long bar but it's because they continuously join it with multies. :y:



Okay, THAT makes sense, thanks. :y:
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby Sam. » Oct 6th, '11, 23:25

Shots fired at Geno clearly visible through the bars.It's like you wrote this in such a fury that you didn't care for the flow ,because I had a hard time flowing on this tbh.I bet this is just a throw away verse.
I liked the way you dissed him considering all of his facets like closing in from all directions.
Also...
Liked this punches a lot.
I cant hold a flow? Homie you polio, lame and don’t match Spyder.
Cause kid after we spit im bound to leave you Job-less like Apple Companies!!
These new age all shit, if you claimin Chaos, Kid itll prolly end in Suicide…


Geno is getting the Dick from everybody why doe :|
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 6th, '11, 23:28

Sam. wrote:Shots fired at Geno clearly visible through the bars.It's like you wrote this in such a fury that you didn't care for the flow ,because I had a hard time flowing on this tbh.I bet this is just a throw away verse.
I liked the way you dissed him considering all of his facets like closing in from all directions.
Also...
Liked this punches a lot.
I cant hold a flow? Homie you polio, lame and don’t match Spyder.
Cause kid after we spit im bound to leave you Job-less like Apple Companies!!
These new age all shit, if you claimin Chaos, Kid itll prolly end in Suicide…


Geno is getting the Dick from everybody why doe :|



Idunno.. It's weird. I'm neutral, but I still don't get it.
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby Sam. » Oct 6th, '11, 23:35

JamaicanPattlez wrote:
Sam. wrote:Shots fired at Geno clearly visible through the bars.It's like you wrote this in such a fury that you didn't care for the flow ,because I had a hard time flowing on this tbh.I bet this is just a throw away verse.
I liked the way you dissed him considering all of his facets like closing in from all directions.
Also...
Liked this punches a lot.
I cant hold a flow? Homie you polio, lame and don’t match Spyder.
Cause kid after we spit im bound to leave you Job-less like Apple Companies!!
These new age all shit, if you claimin Chaos, Kid itll prolly end in Suicide…


Geno is getting the Dick from everybody why doe :|



Idunno.. It's weird. I'm neutral, but I still don't get it.

The punches were in reference to the Comments by Gennette awhile ago.
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby Spyder » Oct 7th, '11, 00:25

not my fault you cant flow, flows perfect for me lol

geno i dont write to a beat? damn all this time i thought that thing i was listening to was a beat. damn maybe that was ur pops gettin it in the ass again hahah

you have no idea the way i write


and im goin at geno cause hes a cocky for no reason douche, its cute he thinks hes so great cause when cole was here he didnt dare speak lol
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Re: Spyder - Keep Quiet

Postby Sam. » Oct 7th, '11, 11:38

Spyder wrote:not my fault you cant flow, flows perfect for me lol

geno i dont write to a beat? damn all this time i thought that thing i was listening to was a beat. damn maybe that was ur pops gettin it in the ass again hahah

you have no idea the way i write


and im goin at geno cause hes a cocky for no reason douche, its cute he thinks hes so great cause when cole was here he didnt dare speak lol

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