Yo Watup Creative Writing

[Sam.]

You say you wrote this messing around so obviously this won't reflect you full capability ,would it ? Even then I ignored the fact that this was your time pass verse and gave you my honest feed & you go ahead and bitch about.If you can't handle honest criticism then please don't post here because that's what your gonna get here..honest feed .I have seen verses by old / new members that claim taking over this section so in compared to that this was weak.By weak does it mean that it was bad or worthless ,no.You definitely need to improve or maybe you're a dope writer confused as to what people would have to say about your dopeness,if that's the case then don't worry ,post your best work and get nice nice feeds tbh.
And you better be good because this place has seen some shitty new writers.

You wanted some more criticism right ? then here it is brah ! :Up your vocab and work on some complex Rhyme Scheme also Read /Study Poetry.

[Jdubem]

Ok thank you for being honest. I was a little put off at first at how you put it and prolly took it worse than what you meant so thanks for clarifying. I think I see what your saying now though. Its alright just too basic. Theres nothing in there that jumps out at you rhyme wise. Gotta admit I did have fun writing this though. I'll be back.

[Sam.]

Chea ! Atta boy
Have to wait to see what you have to offer.

[Words]

You definitely have a message in your songs, and you get it across well. I like the style you write with.
As for the rhyming, the vocab wasn't incredibly impressive, but definitely good stuff.