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Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 13th, '11, 19:26

my fav track i done so far,

http://www.zshare.net/audio/96055600b1f33395/

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/qEMovFJK/Redzek_-_Tired.html


lyrics:


im so tired of not havin a deal
backstabbed too many time to tell how stabbin feels
i aint actin real,i just am and im rappin ill
i wrap and kill,if i dont have it imma rob and steal
im so tired,of goin to study
when everybody's tellin me "you aint blowin my buddy
cuz there aint no jobs"so just do like kid cuddi
yeah do the prayer then go and pursuit the happiness"
how could this be a life when it is just a crappy mess
i sadly guess: fuck laurent wolf, cuz it had me stressed
told you im tired,but i dont need to rest
im tired of everything,cuz i will be the best
i just know that i will,but it just didnt happen yet
is it all i can get?im in love with rappin but rappin left
yep im havin threats,cuz im writting a classic now
but tragic somehow,cuz i still dun have the massive crowds

so tired of bein so lonely
im tired of what we call homies
they'r here when you couldnt fall on the ground
but when you do ,you just see no one around

and im tired of hoes who act virgins
and fakes actin like they never seen a surgeon
im tired of everything cuz i tried so many things
but nothin works and it hurts so i'll just now sing

im tired cuz i tried,cried and thought i died
lied to be desired,i am 2 eyed but cant see the light
im hopeless,cant focus i wrote this with eyes closedd
i chose to play life,and never pause i suppose
yeah i pose with the world could you even picture that
im tired of theeez liars,this life never lets ya have
what you want,what you dont,yeah i guess it gets you wrong
sing along with the song,ding ding dong
all night long i hear ring ring ohhh
cmon you stupid bitch quit callin me a prick,
cuz i'd never hang up,you put it all on me,its sick
but i aint fallin for this shit,
and im talkin about the life im livin
everynight im bleedin with this damn knife im given
man what i write is leaving my heart to your ears
is it that hard to just feel all the sscars that i deal, with
the haha that i hear..fuck it,..ill disappear

so tired of bein so lonely
im tired of what we call homies
they'r here when you couldnt fall on the ground
but when you do ,you just see no one around

and im tired of hoes who act virgins
and fakes actin like they never seen a surgeon
im tired of everything cuz i tried so many things
but nothin works and it hurts so i'll just now sing

i dunno if im a king
all i know is imma win
im a diamond in the dirt
pick me up out of this world


i cried and jumped from extreme happiness
i have been through love and made eternal promises
but i got heart broken so many damn times
i cried while listening to music or whatching pictures of mine
i called just to hear a voice
or feel a noise
i already fell in love from a smile of them bitches
and already thought i would die from too much home-sickness
i had the fear of losing somebody too special
that i ended up losing, was never under arrest yo !
cuz i kept goin,i SURVIVED,still living
and life..? i'll never give that up,couldnt give what im given
and you.. shouldnt give it up neither,In life believe in!



so tired of bein so lonely
im tired of what we call homies
they'r here when you couldnt fall on the ground
but when you do ,you just see no one around

and im tired of hoes who act virgins
and fakes actin like they never seen a surgeon
im tired of everything cuz i tried so many things
but nothin works and it hurts so i'll just now sing





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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Trimss » Nov 13th, '11, 23:04

Okay I'm a begginer (so you won't say "try yourself before talking")

But I noticed some flaws right here. I'll just point out first the thing I liked.

- The beat, good choice;
- The chorus is really good, probably the best thing in this track.
- The bridge is also great.
- Some rhymes on here were awesome and I like the "sing along" line

Overall, I really enjoyed the track. I would give it a 8/10 but it could have been easily more if..

Your first verse man. It's a real mess to understand what you say because of the echos/reverbs and because of the kind of voice you take when you say "you ain't blowin" and the last 4 lines are just so messy I can't understand some words man. Just cut the delays sometimes, or put your overlays in a better place or I don't know.. But it's really disturbing.

Your second verse doesn't have that and it's immediately better to the ear man.

Good job.
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 13th, '11, 23:23

Trimss wrote:Okay I'm a begginer (so you won't say "try yourself before talking")

But I noticed some flaws right here. I'll just point out first the thing I liked.

- The beat, good choice;
- The chorus is really good, probably the best thing in this track.
- The bridge is also great.
- Some rhymes on here were awesome and I like the "sing along" line

Overall, I really enjoyed the track. I would give it a 8/10 but it could have been easily more if..

Your first verse man. It's a real mess to understand what you say because of the echos/reverbs and because of the kind of voice you take when you say "you ain't blowin" and the last 4 lines are just so messy I can't understand some words man. Just cut the delays sometimes, or put your overlays in a better place or I don't know.. But it's really disturbing.

Your second verse doesn't have that and it's immediately better to the ear man.

Good job.

thanks for your time trims,i really appreciate your comment,and its true what you said maybe the overlays in some spots were disturbing but anyways im glad you enjoyed the track :8) :b: :b: :b:
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 16th, '11, 13:32

BUMP ;)
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby gvdz » Nov 16th, '11, 14:39

le tunisien wrote:BUMP ;)
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby gvdz » Nov 16th, '11, 14:40

gvdz wrote:
le tunisien wrote:BUMP ;)
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby gvdz » Nov 16th, '11, 14:41

gvdz wrote:
gvdz wrote:
le tunisien wrote:BUMP ;)
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Trimss » Nov 16th, '11, 15:06

gvdz wrote:
le tunisien wrote:BUMP ;)


Why don't you feed it instead of just quoting him ? lol
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby gvdz » Nov 16th, '11, 15:14

Trimss wrote:
gvdz wrote:
le tunisien wrote:BUMP ;)


Why don't you feed it instead of just quoting him ? lol


i will listen 2 it tonight
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 16th, '11, 15:43

@gvdz

thanks for your listen in advance :flower:
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby gvdz » Nov 16th, '11, 20:54

Dope, i like the beat & the chorus only thing i didnt like is the first verse just like trimms :flower:
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 17th, '11, 14:03

gvdz wrote:Dope, i like the beat & the chorus only thing i didnt like is the first verse just like trimms :flower:

thanks for your time man :worship: and yes maybe the first verse was messy more likely in terms of quality maybe , or even lyrics and flow ? hmmm anyways im glad you qualify it as dope :worship:
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Cookzee » Nov 17th, '11, 21:58

i loved this man! the concept was on the point, the first verse a little messy but the chorus and the second was on point to a tee! i loved it! :D keep up the good work and comment on mine
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Nov 18th, '11, 00:03

Cookzee wrote:i loved this man! the concept was on the point, the first verse a little messy but the chorus and the second was on point to a tee! i loved it! :D keep up the good work and comment on mine

:b: :b: :b: :b: thanks man
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Re: Redzek - TIRED

Postby Le Tunisien » Feb 8th, '12, 03:49

muhfuckin buuuump
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