Midnight EyeZ - Down & Out (Prod. By Sinima)

[Midnight EyeZ]

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This is the first track I recorded for my upcoming album "Deja Vu"...It's been about for a while (recorded it in '09 and the album's still not done lol) I plan to re-record it at some point coz I'm not happy with the vocals, but as always, any feedback's appreciated...



I told you before it happened it was nothing but a bit a sex,
But now you’re tryna call up me talking like you’re my bitter ex,
Telling me you love me and sending your pictures in a text,
A list of missed calls is always full and now I’m getting stressed,
I thought you knew that I just wanted a fuck,
I never knew I was the kinda guy you thought you could love,
Coz when you brought it up, I always acted like I’d forgotten,
But you’re going round telling friends I was the problem,
You’re lying too often, coz honestly you wasn’t that nice,
And if I wasn’t drunk I wouldn’t even look at you twice,
All I wanted was a bit of sugar and spice,
But you’re obsessed now; you need to get a hook on your life,
Coz I’m not looking to wife someone this over possessed,
And it’ll be a waste of time to sit and hope for the best,
Coz I don’t really give a fuck if you’re alone and depressed,
I guess you should’ve thought of that before you opened your legs,

Now let’s stop and talk about you stalking me at walkabout,
You saw me kissing with another girl and tried to call me out,
Now what’s that all about? The bouncers had to escort you out,
You sat down in the corner and waited til I was walking out,
You attacked and started slapping me up,
I had to chuck you down the stairs, jump in a taxi and duck,
You’re mad as fuck; you scarred me with a scratch and a cut,
I had to grab a napkin just to try at patch the slit up,
You psychopathic slut, I don’t wanna be with you,
And I never will be so let’s stop dodging the issue,
How could I possibly miss you, you’re nothing but a crazy bitch,
If you were sane then maybe we’d have a relationship,
But now you’re calling me up, talking like you’re mental as fuck,
Sobbing and crying and getting sentimental and stuff,
And telling me about the future we could be having,
How did it ever come to this from just an evening of passion?

Bitch just leave me alone, I need some peace of my own,
I wanna sleep throughout the night without a beep on my phone,
Without you ringing my home, without you speaking in tones,
That chills my spine every time and makes me weak at the bones,
I fucking hate you; coz you’re making my life a misery,
I wanna cut your throat whenever you try to visit me,
You’re literally out of control; you’re in need of help,
But I really doubt that you know, because you’re so messed,
And every time I try to tell you no it’s hopeless,
I hope this won’t last forever; it’s making no sense,
How could you get so attached from sleeping with me?
Then calling up my phone the next morning speaking to me,
Saying if we just take the time, maybe we can make it right,
But if I’ve told you once a day I’ve told you eighty times,
We couldn’t make it work if we gave it eighty tries,
And now I just hope and pray at birth our fucking baby dies,

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[Eedee]

Shiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiit dude. The beat was FUCKING AMAZING.

Your flow was just... holy shit. Perfect. Rhymes were great and they just worked.
Sorry for the small feed, but I don't see anything wrong with this. Dope as fuck and that "la la" at the beginning is stuck in my head.

Damn. Good shit.

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[Xray]

That was fucking nice. I like how you dissed the shit out of her and then you saved the most shocking line for last. Good shit bruh. Only thing you should have did is a hook and mixed the vocals a bit more. It sounded like it was unmastered, maybe you should add a noise gate, compressor, de-esser, then a compressor again and some reverb and that would get the job done more than likely. But dope track. And I love that beat way too much, shit is insane, even after a few years it's still INFUCKINGSANE.

[Midnight EyeZ]

Yeah dude, that's why I said I need to re-record it in the OP...

Yeah the idea was to keep listeners thinking that it was some deranged obsessed woman, becoming too attached to a guy after a one night stand, until you find out that she's not in fact a crazy stalker, just pregnant...It's even worse to find out that he knows and still thinks she's obsessed with him...Inspired by all the bullshit fathers around me lol...

But cheers for the feedback guys, it's much appreciated!!!...

[Nefarious]

I like everything about this but the chorus and the message kind of, im not a fan of sample's and ive heard that beat a couple times myself, i think i may have even downloaded it a while back and never used it because i realized the chorus spot was taken by the, lalalalalala part haha. the verse spots were awesome tho, and the only reason i didnt like the topic was, i hate women in general so any song to do with a girl i tend to not like much, the twisted, disctusting side of this world is something i try to avoid at all costs. I give it a 8/10 alltogether but every verse was a 10/10 like usual.

[Sam.]

This song stands perfect for what you did with it. From the start till the end the story that you told was really amazing; the level of detailing makes it even more enjoyable. The way you ended each verse was really hard hitting. Perfect set of written Bars and you did full justice to the Beat with it. The flow was one of the highlights of the track along with the Lyrics, the way you rode over the Rhymes was a sheer fabulous job.

I liked the subject matter though and has inspired me to write something. I don't know what more to say in praise to this song, nothing I can say will satisfy you.The only thing that may complement you is the fact that this Song goes straight to my I-Pod with this very 1st listen.

Keep at it.

[Solace]

Who produced this?

[B.A.D.]

Who produced this?

Sinima. dope ass beat

this is pretti dope man, I think your mix could be improved, is clean but not as smooth. You remind me a whole lot to Jedi Mind Tricks, extremely similar, take that as a compliment, you sound pretti good. there's really not much feedback I can give you, but maybe work a bit on your structuring and perfomance overall, cuz there's too many noticeable punch ins and it sounds really weak and takes down a lot of the emotion, also your breath control is very average, so prolly work on a Structure that will make your flow less rushed.

I been listening to this for a while, great track. I think you should be more active feedback wise, feed other members more and have they'll return the favor, its a good track to check out

[Atone]

I'm jealous of your talent...amazing man

[Solace]

Who produced this?

Sinima. dope ass beat

Yeah it's crazy.

To Midnight EyeZ, I commented on Youtube; I don't have much else to say other than I really enjoyed this song. I've been listening to some of The Dead Leaders Of Atlantis and it's pretty good.

[Midnight EyeZ]

Cheers dudes, really appreciate the feedback...

Yeah that track was pretty rushed...I'd recorded it short after I'd recorded the last couple of tracks for my last album, and the quality of the mix sounded alright, but in comparison to my newer tracks it sounds garbage so I'm gonna re-record it...A few lyrics need to be changed aswell...Just the odd word here and there so nothing major...For instance "over possessed", that was meant to be "over obsessed" but I never even noticed til I got to the mixdown and at that point I couldn't be bothered going back to the studio lol...

Yeah I would feed more but I need to get past this idea that I've got that every rapper's gonna be rapping about the same kinda shit...I try to check out unknown rappers when I can but after years of only coming across "club bangers" and "crunk" tracks I really have no interest in it's really put a wall up in my mind...May be judging a book by it's cover but with good reason...I still like to check out new rappers but I'm just not on it as much for the reasons above...I need to get outta the pattern though coz there's some dope unheard of rappers out there just waiting to be listened to...

The reason I dig Nefarious so much is coz he reminds me a lot of myself...He doesn't talk shit, he just gives it raw and emotional, points out his flaws, admits to his problems and sticks a finger up while still keeping it real lyrical...

I will check out more as I go along but I hope that gives some kinda idea why I'm not feeding as much as I could be...

[B.A.D.]

Yeah I would feed more but I need to get past this idea that I've got that every rapper's gonna be rapping about the same kinda shit...I try to check out unknown rappers when I can but after years of only coming across "club bangers" and "crunk" tracks I really have no interest in it's really put a wall up in my mind...

lol, nobody in here does "club bangers" or "crunk", maybe once in a while you'll run across and up-tempo song. And just like everything in life, its always a two way road, interaction leads to interaction, but thats why 90% of internet rappers don't get anywhere, they are all to focused on themselves.

take that advice for what its worth
keep up the good work

[Nefarious]

Lol i couldnt have said that better myself, likewise.

[Midnight EyeZ]

It's not to do with focusing on myself, it's more to do with having so much time spent on giving people the benefit of the doubt then wasting my time...

I'm not gonna lie, I've come across some surprisingly dope, completely unknown, less-than-50-views rappers on YouTube who're sick as fuck and get NO recognition...But at the same time for every dope unknown rapper I come across, I'll come across 100 rappers talking about clubs they don't go to, guns they don't shoot, drugs they don't sell, cars they don't drive, girls they don't get, and all that other bullshit, pushing something like 100,000 views and it pisses the fuck outta me!!!...

So it's not to do with interaction = interaction, coz I've got no problem checking out anyone's shit coz I'd give anyone the time of day...It's more to do with with the mind-set that's developed as a result of those 100,000 viewed clowns giving nothing to the art yet at the same time getting props off it...

But like I said, it's a mindset I'm tryna change...

Appreciate the feedback as usual though

[Atone]

was thinki9n i gave proper feed on this when i posted, guess not, my mistake tho

honestly the lyrics are good, your accent fits the beat pretty well lol, i like how there is no chorus, there is not one really needed for this type of track, \

"I fucking hate you; coz you’re making my life a misery,
I wanna cut your throat whenever you try to visit me,"

pretty much how i feel about my ex sometimes lol, guess thats why i also like this song cuz i can relate to a lil bit, exept for the beginning

but for real tho, dope song man