Trimss - Hell On Earth

[Trimss]

http://www.hulkshare.com/an4g5bna74wx
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Since this section is kinda less active..

When the burning fire reaches stunnin' liars,
When the bomb desire pulls the gunnin' higher,
I'm learning from the wire, I am hollow with a pen,
Drownin' in the sorrow, the sorrow of my pain,
If there's a god, I will follow him in vein,
This mess is odd, got me swallowin' my brain,
Sinkin' in my blood, I'm the devil in a body form,
My trident is a pen, always causes bloody storms,
Pity you poor fans, I get the crowd deformed,
Silly to the core man, don't get in these roudy norms,
Listen to my flow man, this is how it's done,
A demon who slays, a terrorist who loudly bombs,
I slice day and night, there is no way to fight,
I been in my zone so I guess I may now rhyme,
I say loud lines and I make war crimes,
But I'm Hell On Earth so fuck all your poor lives.

Tell me what you think of this one. It's like a month old. (Thanks for the mixing tips Solace )

[B.A.D.]

your accent is really heavy, but real gangsta haha, you have a clear quality but needs some tweaks on the mixdown process.

the flow is ok, I think your pronaunciation gets in the way of a better flow, but its respectable

this was cool, explore different approaches in the way you create songs, try different mixing techniques, and keep it up bro

[4NorthTL]

I don't particularly like the accent but the lyrics are tight. Is that a natural accent or is it something ala Eminem's exaggerated accent on Ass Like That?

I like the beat, it sounds familiar. It sounds like something off of Black Star. Overall the flow, lyrics, and beat were pretty good. Good luck man.

[Trimss]

your accent is really heavy, but real gangsta haha, you have a clear quality but needs some tweaks on the mixdown process.

the flow is ok, I think your pronaunciation gets in the way of a better flow, but its respectable

this was cool, explore different approaches in the way you create songs, try different mixing techniques, and keep it up bro

Lol thanks man, i'll get better with the accent and prononciation and mixing and everything.

I don't particularly like the accent but the lyrics are tight. Is that a natural accent or is it something ala Eminem's exaggerated accent on Ass Like That?

I like the beat, it sounds familiar. It sounds like something off of Black Star. Overall the flow, lyrics, and beat were pretty good. Good luck man.

Nah it's a natural accent, i'm not an english speaker. The beat is from Anno Domini, a great producer

Thank you dude.