AhdduB - Not Today

[Ticalrecords]

hey guys came in with a new song for yall tell me what you think

POF: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=143270&p=1858243#p1858243


http://soundcloud.com/ahddub/not-today- ... silver-kid


Changes

I wake up every morning – as my last one
I go to sleep every night – way past numb
So In between – I sit and dream –
Sipping lean – waiting for a different scene
To appear before me – here’s the story
I’ll cut the bullshit and spare the glory
I’m suicidal – but I refuse the title
I don’t wanna be locked in a true asylum/
with nutcases – that cut veins with
Fucking Homemade serrated - blunt blades in
Their hell hole - teeth yellowed
Believing their ovary eggs are deviled
shell shocked - From their failed plot
to try and get free from their cell block
Fuck the paint on the wall - get real
Rather watch their fucking skin peel/ (0:42)

Everytime I smoke a blunt
I already knows whats up
Yup - another day wasted
The problems - I can’t face em
Not today – not today
Tomorrow its gotta change
Not today not today
Tomorrow its gotta change




I sit in silence – perfect silence
That afgan – gives me words of guidance
It whispers to me – get high or die
And explains - the funny side of life
that purple kush – that purple kush
I pray that it be my burning bush
That white widow – call it Courtney Love
Especially when it comes to scoring drugs/
How can you fight – on that ghandhiji
I think guns and blunts are an anomaly
That giggle smoke - that northern lights
Greener than the sky filled with aurora lights
That Panama red – rose mary jane
See the devil with his rosary chain
but foreal - no matter how crazy the name
don’t excuse the fact I’m wasting the day/

[Ticalrecords]

bump, come on yall

[Nefarious]

First off, i like how you made the chorus this time, this song felt well put together and stayed on topic alot of the time, i smoke weed everyday of my life, so it related to me right away, your flow and delivery were just as good as usual, this is already one of my favourite's ive heard from you.

[Ticalrecords]

hey man thanks, yk i did a another song with the chorus all by myself, i feel like its a more coherent song, tell me what you think of it viewtopic.php?f=38&t=143437

[B.A.D.]

hey man, the singing, and the hook overall is pretti bad, Idk, not feeling it at all, the weird flanger effect or w.e. u added doesn't sound good at all, I recomend you to try a deepr voice and maybe add a layover with a dual chorrus effect, that may sound better.

also the flow, not feeling it that much, to me it sounds a bit off. too fast paced and not well structured to the beat, I think you need to be more relaxed with it and try to plan it better u know?

the lyrics are really good and the quality is not that bad, but I feel that your delivery does not fit your style. I suggest you try to be more calm and smooth man.

great lyrics again man, very inspirational.

keep it up. how is your name pronounced btw?

[Ticalrecords]

heythanks man i appreciate the feedback, tbh i'm not really feeling how the chorus sounds either i will def take your advice and deepen my voice, that might be exactly what it needs haha. and pronounce my name "a doobie" like a joint of marijuana yk? haha its spelled phonetically, i guess.