AhdduB - Throw It All Away

[Ticalrecords]

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hey guys heres a new song, called throw it away, tell me what yall think?

http://soundcloud.com/ahddub/throw-it-a ... od-by-joey


Being a smartass in hip hop – does have its pitfalls
They always want the shit talk – and love seeing you pissed off
Why the fuck you think slim shady got so famous
Angry white male is the biggest demographic in our nation
Swear to god - Nothing can be happy go lucky
I live in the suburbs – what would I know about having no money,
What the fuck would I know - about the stick up kids
I can only try to describe the sick feeling I get up with/
Its one of despair – nothing compares – to lack of air
In me when I'm on stage and not a single fan is there
They all stand quiet – I’m like obviously this isn’t working
Its like im rapping to the beat of a fucking cricket chirping
I ask for feedback please man – talk to me straight
The only steps I need to take - are the ones off of the stage
Im like fuck it man – I already know it’s a waste,
Its just a dream - fuck it I might as well throw it away/


Its a damn shame – I’ve had enough of this rap game
I can’t make – ends meet – not a cent seen,
I’m ten deep Into this mixtape – at least this way – any other MC
Can see what I do for passion – with unbridled enthusiasm
I use inaction – as a cop out – I talk out
The side of my mouth – cuz I found,
Giving a fuck is actually a sign how
much a rapper really wants to win
so I do away with the raunchiness
if I had rocks I’d be flaunting them
if I make history – who’s watching it?
I wanna know if opportunity is really knocking with
More than just The invisible hand of economics which
Doesn’t bode well for any of us – plenty of us
Aint waiting for a hand out – we too damn proud
So we do everything we can to make sure we stand out
till then fuck it man - I guess I’m anonymous
but the one thing you can’t say about me is I’m monotonous
what the hell do I care? I fucking doubt its my choice
but I just can’t keep the sarcasm out of my voice

[Steve Spag]

Damn, this beat is really banging. Lyrics are nice, flow is decent, I just think your delivery is a bit too strong for the beat. Keep practising man!

[Ticalrecords]

thanks man. i just posted another song i recorded, i'd like your opinion on it

[Steve Spag]

Will do, check my tape when you got a minute too, this site's been sleeping on me lately lol.

[Ticalrecords]

bump

[Solace]

I can't deny, you choose some really fuckin' good beats. Joey Trife, I'll have to check him out. Again, I feel your flow was choppy and rushed in areas. I think your delivery would have sounded much better if your flow was polished. It sounds like you don't pace yourself at all. Everything goes hand in hand so yeah. I feel like the only line that flowed perfectly how it should have or how I would have done it was

What the hell do I care? I fucking doubt its my choice,
But I just can’t keep the sarcasm out of my voice.

Altogether those lines just sounded better than everything else and if everything was like that it would have been a really great step up.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks for the feedback man i really appreciate it

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Very nice man, I enjoyed listening to it. The beat is Sick1! I think your flow is pretty good. Some areas were a little choppy but overall pretty dope!

[Ka0t1c]

sounds good man, weird voice and flow, but brings out your personality, not really lyrical, but the content is there, so it makes it a good classic song for u to keep and enjoy. keep your standards high and you will get the credit you deserve.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks for the love man

[Eedee]

Beat is great. I agree with Solace though, you tend to rush some things on your lyrics and flow - it would sound better if you had better syllable control and timing because your voice is great. Just work on your flow and you'll be good to go! Your rhymes are alright as well, good multies in there and wordplay ("steps I need to take are off the stage") etc. Good stuff.

[Words]

I tried the link, and listening to it coming back and giving feedback. For some reason though, I couldn't get past the listening part.....damn you replay button.

This is the second or third piece I've heard from you (I think). If memory serves me the other ones were "ehhh" to my liking, but this one was great. Lyrically, a great piece with a solid message that was easily picked up on by the listener. On top of that, the flwo and beat were on key. Really good job on this one, going back to listen more now.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks yall i appreciate the listens

[Cookzee]

i really liked this, it had a strong message that as was said above, was easily picked up very easily, the flow was consistent and worked well, i do feel like you tried to hard when you actually did the verses rather than letting it naturally come out but it's an easy line to cross! overall the song is actually quite moving and the beat BANGS!!
well done! keep it up!