Eedee - Clownin' Around

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145981&p=1920299#p1920299

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JcJ8G0x4 ... ure=relmfu


[Verse] (:29)

Back when I was nine, my arms were full, right?
With stuffed animals on a carnival ride.
But then I saw a dark place it was rotten nasty,
A clown with cotton candy came up and sought to ask me
"A couple questions if I may, come back here where it's quiet"
We took a double left turns and I saw his hair was dyed red.
We were behind a booth, that's where he kindly took,
Off his clown nose and shoved it in my mouth, I was shook.
I fuckin' hate clowns, and he creeped up slowly,
His face got close, I saw his cheeks were rosy.
I said "Please don't hold me, sir, can I go back to my mom?"
He said "Not until I fuckin' hold your ass in my palm."
I started gettin' dizzy as he undressed me slowly,
The rest was noisy but he did his best to blow me.
My mouth got slap-shut, he was flexing his hips,
And kids, that's what happens on your first ecstasy trip.

[J.R.]

This is pretty nice and a new kinda style for ya dude. I like it, reminds me of someone (on ere, can't name him atm) but its a solid drop. I'd count my syllables a little closer, minus a few stretched lines it's solid. Keep it up

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

AHAHAHAHAHAH damn this was awesome!! I love topics like this! the rhyming was solid through the whole thing and the content was great!! I liked the twist at the end a lot! really crazy dude. great piece keep it up.

[Mr.DGAF]

This was fun to read haha. The multies and everything are nice, and the story unfolds quite nicely. The last line was clever, didn't expect that at all.

[Eedee]

You seem to have a lot of homosexual fantasies though.

You jelly tbh

[mdemaz]

That was a pretty good read.
I noticed you tightened up your flow, good.

[Slim Fiasco]

Haha, that was a great read man. As others have pointed out, I didn't know where were you going with it, but a great twist. The flow seems good too, so keep it up.

[ShadysDisciple]

This was dope man, the flow was easy to get, the multies were dope, and the story really painted a picture in my head. Good drop man