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"Raps poltergeist"

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 18th, '12, 00:17

Another attempt at horror core, I definitely like this one better than my last try, I'm really liking this style keeps me interested and its kind of fun!

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146061
BEAT: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8GPqAxRlWtI

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I write devilish shit I'm raps poltergeise
then find a cellobate bitch and grab hold of knives
Ill sever her ribs and stab both her eyes
I'll never just quit I'm like a black whole of life
take you deep into the dark where your ass wont survive
Now I'm creeping in the park found the last hoe tonight
You want to gamble with your life shit please throw the dice
Acting like I wont bestow fires and explode her ride
tear in her eyes slashing throats wont suffice
fearing for life as dasch hold the mic
take shots of rat poison and cyanide
then hop inside a ride and fly down highway 95
with a slut in the trunk who just crys n whines
Chop the bitch up and eat her like a slice of pie
some times it feels like my mind aint wired right
Or I'm screwed in the head like frankenstein
cause while your at a party banging dimes
I'm with a fat skank her ankles tied
smoking dank committing blatant crimes
staying so crazed robbing a bank with spikes
kidnap the teller then rape her mind
and when the cops show I flank their sides
Place the cable right then strangle tight
if theyre still alive its hanging time
Tie the rope to the branch and say good bye
push them bitches off and they should die
Dang I might get the lethal injection
cause my penis ejected this demonly presence
thats fiending to get some peoples intestines
you see I'm from the evilest section
where peace is infected with screaming and wreckage
But I stay at the desk just beasting a record
cause leading your death is a pleasing endeavor
So I'll leave you bleeding needing a stretcher
tapped into your future saw you sleeping forever
5 minutes from now youll be peacefully restin
Once the reaper of death feasts at ya flesh and
if you make it to heaven you'll see whos the best
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Re: "Raps poltergeist"

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 18th, '12, 00:58

Lol thanks Menzo, it means a lot!!! I definitely feel like I have improved but I went on a vacation and seem to be in a definite writers block so hopefully I'll get it back! Also, I will be trying other topics, this is probably my last horror core piece that I post for a while, my next track is a story telling one that I'm kind of excited about it should be pretty good!! Any way, thanks for the feedback dude means a lot.
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Re: "Raps poltergeist"

Postby Eedee » Jun 18th, '12, 03:18

What Menzo said. You've improved loads. Not much else to say, keep up the progress!
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Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 18th, '12, 10:13

Loved the rhyming man, great job!
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Re: "Raps poltergeist"

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 18th, '12, 15:36

Thanks guys! Glad to know yall like it.
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Re: "Raps poltergeist"

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 18th, '12, 17:29

HAHAHA @ Trex yeah dude I feel you on that. I actually wrote it to a beat i found on youtube that was really dark but I lost it and just decided to go with till I collapse haha!

Anyways thanks man!
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