Over Your Head (Fiasco Day 2)

[CrashBand]

here's my day 2 piece gents. I will feed the verses in a couple of hours.

Firstly and foremost my bitch has a sore throat
Doctor said she was lying, I locked that witch in a wardrobe
You've ditched your slutty act and wonder why I didn't like you
I've said bitch, ditch and witch, shit what else is there to rhyme to
At least it's not generic beasting how I be dope
Talking shit that we know while falling into weak flows
Its cliche, to display your power trippin' egos
I guess I'm no better talking about how she never deep throats
And how I meet girls and have them out of their blouse
They go down on the couch, my sperms drown in their mouth
Astounded how their coward spouses found all this out
Within a minute I was on the pavement down for the count
With maximum embarrassment but minimal hurt
But Crash has now established an unpredictable verse
With multi syllable words and punchlines over your head
I'm over my girls too, hers were mediocre at best

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

DAMN great piece man, there were multis every where and you kept the content on point. I liked the way you use inner multis a lot, this piece seemed to flow great from what I can tell. some really creative lines in there, and you used imagery really well. nicee keep it up!

[Slim Fiasco]

Nice job man, definitely! I loved the rhyming, and the way some of the lines were a real-time references. What I mean is, you were referring to what were you writing, like the use of rhymes and stuff. The deep throat line was dope, and I liked the last 3 lines the most. This sounded very good:

With maximum embarrassment but minimal hurt
But Crash has now established an unpredictable verse

[Mr.DGAF]

Good job writing something a bit different from most of the rest of day 2's pieces. I enjoyed reading it, flow came smoothly. Rhymes aren't. Super long but they're placed perfectly throughout, something thats harder to do than actually making the multie.

[SG.]

As name said, you're underrated. Once again, I loved it. I liked the self-awareness of this piece. But I feel like you went slightly off-topic when you did this. Still a great piece though.

[CrashBand]

Cheers guys

and yeah thanks Geno I was thinking people are sleeping on that. Perhaps it went over their head.

[MikeNUFC]

This is structured very well for a quick piece. The random intro is affective, as it links nicely to 'what else is there to rhyme to'. It's a nice meta concept.

The rhyming is solid and it flows really nicely. The word choice is bit simplistic overall but it's hardly a major problem. Good stuff.