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Burning Chest (Fiasco Day 8)

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Burning Chest (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 26th, '12, 16:37

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146354&p=1928633#p1928633

Verse-
I'm the secret to writing and murdering raps
I'm the evil thats fighting till ya vertebrate snaps
the demon inside ya thats burning your chest
But better yet I'm just what god created
I'll have you walking the gates of the honest place
talking to abe or maybe stalking satan
looking in the eyes of monsters faces
who knows where you'll go I'm the transportation
the land lords hate me cause I'm banned and maybe
I make cancer babies or hoes dancing crazy
understand that lately im keeping the peace
cause people are seeking me in the streets
no feinding for me lets get back to the point
All I really am is a fat sack and a joint
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Re: Burning Chest (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 26th, '12, 21:17

Haha, this was cool. Like the almost entire bar rhyming, that's impressive. Flow was pretty smooth, rhymes were nice as always. Good idea and nice execution, after figuring out what it was the entire piece made sense because at first I was like "This is kinda random and crazy".
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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