Cryptic - Ready or not

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LOF - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=150689&p=2043801#p2043801

Song - http://soundcloud.com/cryptic6/ready-or-not

Let me know what you think, I'm still making my final tweaks before the song is finished so all feedback is greatly appreciated

[Eedee]

You had some nice rhyme schemes, but nothing too intricate, it seemed.

Vocal quality was okay, could've had better mixing, IMO. Your voice sounds like that swag rap bullshit and it sounds terrible, although your content was a little better than that lol.

The vocals were panned to the left slightly and threw me off... and the beat/vocal volume didn't seem at the right ratio.

[preest]

to be honest I think the delivery needs work, I like the lyrical content and you voice is dope but I feel it lacked just a little bit of passion! I like some of the rhyming but I was kind of waiting for it to get going and for you to go crazy but it didnt happen lol - believe me mate I've heard alot worse so your on the right tracks but I think its just a case of finding the perfect voice/flows/attitude for the right tracks! other than that its dope, sound like you have potential bro!!

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to be honest I think the delivery needs work, I like the lyrical content and you voice is dope but I feel it lacked just a little bit of passion! I like some of the rhyming but I was kind of waiting for it to get going and for you to go crazy but it didnt happen lol - believe me mate I've heard alot worse so your on the right tracks but I think its just a case of finding the perfect voice/flows/attitude for the right tracks! other than that its dope, sound like you have potential bro!!

Thanks for the feed man, it was something about the beat that held me back but i've been working on my delivery since then. I'm working on a new up-beat song that in my opinon sounds much better content/delivery wise. It would be cool if you check it out when it drops

[Ticalrecords]

i agree with however said you need to show your passion a lil more. there was line that bothered me something like "i'll eat your head like a ruler" - idk maybe i heard wrong, but idk what it means if i heard right. anyways you got flow and that rhyme scheme is def there. just put a lil more umph into it i guess loll. the beat was fire tho i was bopping my head.


mind checking mine out? its called AhdduB - One Last PSA
thanks in advance

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i agree with however said you need to show your passion a lil more. there was line that bothered me something like "i'll eat your head like a ruler" - idk maybe i heard wrong, but idk what it means if i heard right. anyways you got flow and that rhyme scheme is def there. just put a lil more umph into it i guess loll. the beat was fire tho i was bopping my head.


mind checking mine out? its called AhdduB - One Last PSA
thanks in advance

Thanks for the feed, ahha i kept running out of breath at that line, it was actually "This is my life on the line i inch ahead like a ruler" I'll check yours after i get a few hits into me

[Ticalrecords]

ahhhh that makes much more sense, yea fasho thats a legit line. my ears must have deceived me loll. and thanks for returning the favor

[Dlovetv]

I think the delivery could be much better, not sure if your reading the lyrics but if you are try memorizing them before recording,

Lyrics are dope though, and I like the beat, the delivery/flow issue gets better with time so just keep working and it'll come

Check out my verse, if you have a moment
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