Painkiller - Back At It (freestyle)

[PAINKILLƎR]

Haven't dropped any solo shit, I'm excited. Hope everyone enjoys this freestyle I made.

Linkizzle for Feedizzle

I'm back at it like a mad addict with a bad habbit
with crack and it hurts dammit and I can't stand it
So i write and cause damage that irritates like a damn itch
"Pain please, you need to stop!" "I would but I can't bitch!"
I get a rush every time I clutch a pen writing a song
From beginning to end, then I do it all over again
despite that I'm easily distracted by the thoughts of violence
I've ever inacted, all the ideas I have ever caught in silence
Never seem to matter because it seems that no one understands
My ill mind and master plans, then you stumble onto something like:
Waking up this morning discovering I had a fan
referencing my shit, can't believe it, my very own Stan
Yo man, rhyme for rhyme, I like that weak shit you wrote
But swallow that pride down, and pray to God you don't choke

Dammit I just realize it's only 14 bars

[CanadaPure]

Damn I really liked those first four bars, they were really tight. Nice drop Pain, also good counting ability doe. Haha.

[PAINKILLƎR]

dope shit bru

Thanks bru <4

Damn I really liked those first four bars, they were really tight. Nice drop Pain, also good counting ability doe. Haha.

lmao thanks bru, I could have sworn I had 16 bars on my piece of paper, dammit I fucked up.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Soon, Imma talk to Eedee about that. Hopefully I can get a collaboration going with him.

[PAINKILLƎR]

This is cool, just an freestyler track, as you said. Nothing special. Good way to showcase your skill in a quick way. Nothing much to say, maybe just try more concepts like you did with CP with your last two drops for the future. This is a good way to practice writing though, I used to write shit like this all the time, like 5 times a day.

Yeah this was just a freestyle trying to get some practice in before the CW competition starts, I didn't really put a direction with this just tried to rhyme. Except I throw a little jab at someone, it might be obvious to some or may not...



Thanks TRex I really appreciate it.

I also have some concepts in mind, I'm saving some for the CW Tournament and some for the collaboration written EP with CP.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Thanks bigray

[Eedee]

First four bars were awesome with the rhyme schemes.

get a rush / clutch a pen = INVERSE BITCH

Anyway, yeah. Cool shit.

[PAINKILLƎR]

First four bars were awesome with the rhyme schemes.

get a rush / clutch a pen = INVERSE BITCH

Anyway, yeah. Cool shit.

Thanks Eedee.

[12characters]

I think you could have taken the "down" out, after the "swallow your pride" as the syllables would have still flowed and it wouldn't have sounded as redundant/awkward. Really cool line though.

[PAINKILLƎR]

I think you could have taken the "down" out, after the "swallow your pride" as the syllables would have still flowed and it wouldn't have sounded as redundant/awkward. Really cool line though.

Oh yeah, I see what you mean. I'm glad you liked it though. Those last 4 lines were jabs at someone

Thanks for the feed 12

[CanadaPure]

Replace the last two bars that are missing with me talking about how dope you are, like Snoop Dog on "X" by Xzibit. lmao

[PAINKILLƎR]

So there you have, Shouty to my ***** Eedee
C to the muthafucking P
Mr. Canada, Catastrophic, Conceptual, C-P OG...

[SliK]

Not bad at all but like anyone there is room for improvement.
When you are changing the rhyme scheme try to work the current rhyme into the first half of the next bar. It makes the transmission much easier for the reader as they are less likely to stumble with the flow.


P.S. MORE MULTIEZ

[PAINKILLƎR]

Not bad at all but like anyone there is room for improvement.
When you are changing the rhyme scheme try to work the current rhyme into the first half of the next bar. It makes the transmission much easier for the reader as they are less likely to stumble with the flow.


P.S. MORE MULTIEZ

Thanks for the advice, oh and I will most definitely work on my multi's in the CW Competition. This was just a freestyle for fun.

[SliK]

Ehh tbh multies aren't as important as over all flow IMO. Depends what you want though; if you're trying to tick off a check list like you have to in battles and what not then yes you need more multies. If you just want to be able to drop enjoyable pieces that are entertaining and easy to follow I wouldn't worry about jamming multies into it for the sake of it. Multies can help with the flow but if they're forced or "reached" for it detracts from the flow. I think the transitioning is more important, your rhyming is fine