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Downloading Weed

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Downloading Weed

Postby Just Silver » Feb 28th, '13, 00:40

Feed - Geno Shots *plz copy n paste

Feel like if we die its just a game over
Words cant express when im sober
Verbs chant select them in order
Of which that i speak dialect from a beast
I dial up beats download software
My hardware had a hard time when it got here
Thats me , tongue in cheek no rimjob queer
Seeking somethin to complete, data progresses
Haters make a mess of my lyrical efforts
Electrical measures a spectacle to pleasure
Decimals at the retina estimated character
Guessing im an amateur ill knockem out the area
Massive hysteria,like class in America
Sand in my ass from the last uzi blast
Sorry if the Hook didnt catch
Never read the books in the back
I used to analyze visualize the facts
Started to realize real lives from rap
through real eyes my mind just finds the crap
Imagery is quite entertaining
The music interchanging words rearranging
Slurs through pains of drinking and thinking
Mostly smoking and hoping and spitting with wishing
My potency was bigger cause im noticing the picture
On my screen just a face, with a swollen figure
Beaten from the fate that life can deliver
So im treatin my liver to surgeon general liquors
For certain the warning catches my attention
But i dont grasp like a Kenyan too fast for my sentence
Like prisoners on their periods im serious theyre listenin
To everything experienced on lined paper
Behind bars and my minds behavior
Acts upon its self im blind with a razor
Sliting main vains of lyrics and a changer
Experience my anger puts myself at danger
Unless it a whole pager so i dont age
With stress wrinkles and stretches makin a mess
Virus is my single threat im smokin weed cess
My signal left drove a car signaled left
Kept "righting" with not a single F
Like middle fingers kept to themselves
They just wept and have held their shelves
So they aint swept under like everyone else
Left a a deathnote in front of the couch, im out
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Re: Downloading Weed

Postby Just Silver » Mar 1st, '13, 04:30

Bump Bro
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Re: Downloading Weed

Postby Just Silver » Mar 2nd, '13, 15:07

Last Fucking Bump
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Re: Downloading Weed

Postby Just Silver » Mar 2nd, '13, 17:07

Hage wrote:I can't write for shit myself so can't really give feedback on skill or whatsoever, but it was a great read :b:

thanks lol thats all that really matters :smoking:
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Re: Downloading Weed

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Mar 3rd, '13, 07:31

Had some really good rhymes in here, and it flowed well for the most part. I'm sure I've said this many times but I can't give you real constructive criticism since I'm still a less experienced writer. I still enjoyed it though, good drop.

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Re: Downloading Weed

Postby Just Silver » Mar 3rd, '13, 15:36

PAINKILLƎR wrote:Had some really good rhymes in here, and it flowed well for the most part. I'm sure I've said this many times but I can't give you real constructive criticism since I'm still a less experienced writer. I still enjoyed it though, good drop.

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thnx guy although you are a good writer :smoking:
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