Redzek - How Many? ( Feat SPYDER)

[Le Tunisien]

"How Many?" featuring Spyder, another song off my tape "No Shame". lemme know what you think? cheers

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LYRICS:

when your eyes only know the taste of pain
your lips shiver,you realise the waste of brain
when your thinkin about nothin,just sayin im weak
and yours tears digg their own way down to your cheeks
and everybody deniably askin you are you sad?
You seem sad,your voice is,do you feel Bad?
so your heart answers cuz your lips couldnt pronounce
"i am sad" but i wouldnt announce
my crying is sad,and my smile is
my words are sad,and so is my silence
i look myself in the mirror,sayin lets quit..
my sadness is just strange and thats it
cuz now it became a part of my aspects
will i "have it all,but i already had this
somehow i wasnt able to escape this sadness
as if it became a part of my life,but i cant just
quit!

how many friendship meant love,but they didnt know
how many "what's up" meant i miss you but they didnt show
how many coincidence was on purpose
how many "im leaving" meant keep me but they aint heard this


sacrificin all you have is not everything,its confusin
cuz most of the ones we sacrifice for we lose em
stay real and, dont just give away your feelings
cuz you might degrade yourself,and what they do is steal them
like an evil deamon as if there was a good one
they explained life, but i understood none
am i too dumb to stomp,no i guess i should run
it seems like im doin nothin?im wait for problems to be solved
i got them booty calls,i'll call later.now im truly off
and im too sad to turn me on,fuck it ill shut myself down
im tired of this all,it sucks,its like im twelve how
cuz im cryin like a kid,i really need some help now
cuz i felt proud how im still strong standin tall
despite of how weak i get,i held but now my hand will fall
i know its wrong,but cmon just sing this song as it goes along


how many friendship meant love,but they didnt know
how many "what's up" meant i miss you but they didnt show
how many coincidence was on purpose
how many "im leaving" meant keep me but they aint heard this


I admit most nights I could see through the pain
But im tired and I don’t wanna be in your game
Its no joke why must I keep repeating myself
You cant put me down until you feel what ive felt.
You promised me success and steered me to Hell
Why don’t you stay quiet and try hearin me out.

Every day youd change and I saw the pain surface
You were out playin the game while I fought the same urges
Deceiving and cheatin me I see I became worthless
Til every name came searchin for this fuckin changed person.
Lets face the facts, you blame me for how we acted
Its basic math, and you needed to be subtracted.
I hate your ass, when it got to the end I thought id had it
When I balled a fist, but I luckily controlled my actions.
But you called it quits and pointed out our difference
When I was breaking ground to find a common interest.
You forgot all this shit, the shit you called your business
I saw you in my future but I had a faulty vision
I’m just appalled, was it something that I missed and
Could have ended without one of our fuckin wrists slit?
But each days a gift, and thank god its almost Christmas
Cause today I got the courage to cross you off my wish list.

how many friendship meant love,but they didnt know
how many "what's up" meant i miss you but they didnt show
how many coincidence was on purpose
how many "im leaving" meant keep me but they aint heard this




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[Eedee]

The track has a good vibe to just listen to, ya know? I like the melody of it.

Your first two verses had a solid flow, you messed up a few times, but maybe it's because of your jumbled ad-libs. I think you need to line them up all properly, some are nice and mixed well, whilst others are off and it jumbles the main vocals and makes it sound sloppy. Rhyming was solid, nothing impressive, but you had your fair share of multis.

Chorus was nice, probably my favorite part about the song; really felt good to listen to. Smooth.

Spyder's bridge was awkward as fuck...

His verse was better, flow felt rushed at times, rhyming was good too. Saw some punchlines lol, good ole Spyder.

Quality of Spyder's verse vocal wise was good, seemed to be mixed well enough.

Good song, I liked your tape too Redzek. Especially the song we're on

[Just Silver]

not bad i Dl'd

[Just Silver]

I can barely understand Redzek sometimes idk if its the accent or production

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed guys

glad u posted this as a solo, this and the other track we did got overlooked.
i think was the worse of the two we did, on my part.

Le i thought you did great, ive gotten use to the accent so that didnt really phase me.

cant believe how much ive stepped up audio-wise even from that track lol

[Le Tunisien]

thanks for the feed guys

glad u posted this as a solo, this and the other track we did got overlooked.
i think was the worse of the two we did, on my part.

Le i thought you did great, ive gotten use to the accent so that didnt really phase me.

cant believe how much ive stepped up audio-wise even from that track lol

yeah our other song " In Another World" ill post it next
thanks for the feedbacks guys

[313Relapse]

Good song overall it's got a good vibe to it, you ride the beat well and i find the chorus and your delivery mesh well with the beat. Even if i am the farthest thing from an autotune endorser the chorus it didn't sound terrible in this one. You definitely get on some pretty intricate rhyme schemes and i think your voice really comes out when you get on these rhyme schemes. Flow was descent no complaints there. The last verse sounds really stumbled and edited to fuck at the start but once it drops the voice is sounding better. All in all this feels like a complete track and the same vibe is kept start to finish. Good drop man keep it up

[yung rom]

well, first off that beat was pretty dope. your verses were really smooth (there were a couple lines I felt that could've been made better by getting rid of words or adding some, but the overall vibe was good). like everyone else, I felt like the bridge was really out of place and it seemed like it just didn't rhyme at all. However, I thought Spyder's verse was awesome so the song ended up being really good even after the odd bridge. I would say just get rid of the bridge, or at least change the lyrics, because it seems really out of place and mad awkward.

[Le Tunisien]

thank you guys for the feedbacks they are all appreciated Thanks alot !
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[Ticalrecords]

i liked it even though there were some parts where Rezdek slurred his words. the hook was damn good, atl east the melody, and reading the lyrics, it makes it even better but again, the pronunciation was a problem. liked the last verse from spyder too.

mind critiquing mine?

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[Block]

Tunisien:

Your pronunciation has gotten much better since I first heard your stuff. Still, you seem to pronounce a lot of things oddly. If you want to get a grasp of pronouncing things better, watch a ton of American films and study how they say things--a vocal coach told me that.

Your flow seems decent, for the most part. Your main problem, as far as I can tell, is that you're not putting ENOUGH syllables into your lines sometimes. This makes your flow seem choppy and not as smooth as it could be. This is a better problem than over-stuffing your lines, though.



Spyder:

Again, you've gotten better. My biggest critique for you is that you seem to be trying to catch up with the beat, rather than flowing to it and riding it. This is a matter of how you listen to the beat while you rap. Try listening to the melody, rather than the drums. It's a little difficult to get used to, because your ears are tuned to listening to the percussion. But I promise if you force yourself to do it you'll see a huge difference in your flow, and your emotion will come naturally after that.

[Spyder]

Thanks for the tip man, I'll try to do that in future pieces

[Le Tunisien]

thanks alot block for the feedbacks ,ill work on that !

[Him Shadow]

I like the vibe of the song, but I think sometimes it's hard to understand what you guys say. good thing that you posted lyrics to the song;p