I'm cuttin' the shit, New Freestyle (text)

[Kojack]

Yo after this we gona hear the song

Bang bang

See ya

Yeah mothaphuckaz it's Kojack back in the shit
i get my nine mill and i stomp yo bitch
fofive glock fofive on block
i'm Thug as P or not
Let the bitches come in i wanna fuck em up
when my gun you should kiss my ass
(beat finishes)
ohhhhhhhhhh shit i cant continue , i'm tired of this shit

Look i won't continue this but the song will be
the most mothafuckin good in this mothaphuckin' hole rap shit

[Kojack]

[4D]

That`s the most retarded verse i`ve ever heard, and i didn`t even hear it yet!!

[Infliction]

yo kojack man.. you really gotta build ya vocab up... it gets borin hearin the same old shit, rhyming: Shit, fuck, ass, bitch. It gets real borin homie, build the vocab up, makes yea rhymes a lot better you'd be surprised.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

[Inches]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

well put bar

[Kojack]

Yo PLASPP thankz for the hint homie

[Kojack]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

well put bar

i yo INCH

tell me a similarity between GAME and LLOYD BANKS

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

well put bar

i yo INCH

tell me a similarity between GAME and LLOYD BANKS

both of them are more gangsta than you

[Kez]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

well put bar

i yo INCH

tell me a similarity between GAME and LLOYD BANKS

both of them are more gangsta than you

Owned.

[king_mc]

that wuz THE WORST shit i've ever read

[PmT-Faith]

agreed ^^^

[.Giorgo.]

Look, i'm a newbe in battle shit. Writing is okay, i have a few song in tekst.
My english is not really good but common'.

Even i know the basic things. Let it rhyme, that's very important.
And put a nice structure. Lines like this :

''Cold and alone, i kill ya, i put a bullet in ya /head./
You're ice cold than, no one will mis you.. just /dead./ ''

And not like this :

''fofive glock fofive on block
i'm Thug as P or not ''.

Common' dude, that's really bad for u.
U can do better.

[Inches]

well ehm..... it rythmed a little really kojack but come on man seriously you AINT a gangsta learnt o rap fur fuck sake

well put bar

i yo INCH

tell me a similarity between GAME and LLOYD BANKS

both of them are more gangsta than you

lmao
there both good rappers thats what