Poetry Project #1: Imagery
It is a warm summer night,
And my eyes are filled with fright,
Because the starts aren
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by Rae » Dec 6th, '06, 22:57
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by Fi.J. » Dec 8th, '06, 15:57
the first one is really nice!!!keep it like that.
second one,I don't know what haiku is,so dunno what to suggest you..
third one and last one are quite good,but in the last one I'd eliminate the lines about your parents..
second one,I don't know what haiku is,so dunno what to suggest you..
third one and last one are quite good,but in the last one I'd eliminate the lines about your parents..
Fi.J.
There's a certain mystique when I speak, that you notice that it's sorta unique,
cos you know it's me, my poetry's deep, and I'm still matic the way I flow to this beat, you can't sit still, it's like tryin to smoke crack and go to sleep, I'm strapped
PROOF RIP..
There's a certain mystique when I speak, that you notice that it's sorta unique,
cos you know it's me, my poetry's deep, and I'm still matic the way I flow to this beat, you can't sit still, it's like tryin to smoke crack and go to sleep, I'm strapped
PROOF RIP..
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Re: English ...
by Rae » Dec 8th, '06, 20:57
Fi.J. wrote:the first one is really nice!!!keep it like that.
second one,I don't know what haiku is,so dunno what to suggest you..
third one and last one are quite good,but in the last one I'd eliminate the lines about your parents..
iight thank you very! much
screename on Zune Social - HispanicLUVER
I drink more than you, I party harder than you do, And my car is faster than yours too! RAWWRR!
www.myspace.com/harleyquinn667 <--- add me
I drink more than you, I party harder than you do, And my car is faster than yours too! RAWWRR!
www.myspace.com/harleyquinn667 <--- add me
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