Tell me what u think of these lines

[-[Zach]-]

this is just sumthin' that popped in2 my head. tell me what u think.

i fear we're headin' for the worst
the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats
packed to the max
movin' in packs
what kind of life is that

i just want sum feedback. plz don't be too cruel.

[Kez]

Nothing special to it, just average lines really

Couldn't of said it better.
No wordplay, no multis, there was a hint of structure and flow.

[-[Zach]-]

Nothing special to it, just average lines really

Couldn't of said it better.
No wordplay, no multis, there was a hint of structure and flow.

as long as noones saying it completely sucks, i guess its decent. but what are multis?

[Kez]

i fear we're headin' for the worst
the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats
packed to the max
movin' in packs
what kind of life is that

Well for life is that you rhymed the end word that with packs.
A multi is somethin like this

Movin' in silent packs leaving tiger tracks
Sick of survivin crap, what kind of life is that?

A multi's where you rhyme the word(s) before it as well as the end words, hard to explain but my example should give you the gist of it. The multis are in bold.

[TRshady]

I think your being harsh on him Kez:

i fear we're headin' for the worst the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats, packed to the max
movin' in packs, what kind of life is that

^ That's how I imagined it would be rapped, and it would make for some hot
lines in a verse. Breaking up lines takes away from the quality, I think you've done well Zachaveli

[-[Zach]-]

i fear we're headin' for the worst
the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats
packed to the max
movin' in packs
what kind of life is that

Well for life is that you rhymed the end word that with packs.
A multi is somethin like this

Movin' in silent packs leaving tiger tracks
Sick of survivin crap, what kind of life is that?

A multi's where you rhyme the word(s) before it as well as the end words, hard to explain but my example should give you the gist of it. The multis are in bold.

oh. i thought those were compound syllables.

[Kez]

I think your being harsh on him Kez:

i fear we're headin' for the worst the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats, packed to the max
movin' in packs, what kind of life is that

^ That's how I imagined it would be rapped, and it would make for some hot
lines in a verse. Breaking up lines takes away from the quality, I think you've done well Zachaveli

Ahh yeah, didn't notice that.
Sorry Zachaveli, my fault.
Yeah they are compounded syllables, but you don't have to use them to be good. It is good, i suppose i just look for multis in something before anything else, my own fault.

[-[Zach]-]

I think your being harsh on him Kez:

i fear we're headin' for the worst the Devil's walkin' this earth
and he's got us constantly strapped with gats, packed to the max
movin' in packs, what kind of life is that

^ That's how I imagined it would be rapped, and it would make for some hot
lines in a verse. Breaking up lines takes away from the quality, I think you've done well Zachaveli

Ahh yeah, didn't notice that.
Sorry Zachaveli, my fault.
Yeah they are compounded syllables, but you don't have to use them to be good. It is good, i suppose i just look for multis in something before anything else, my own fault.

its all good, man. i'm just surprised it got any feedback that wasn't negative.

[Kojack]

medium quality

[spitz]

i mean theres only so much u can get outta jus readin the lines. i mean imagine jus readin the lyrics to bully with no prior knowledge of the song? ud think its weird. matters how u flow it.